whatever i do is never going to be enough for you

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nandy0894, Feb 21, 2012.

  1. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    i dust the house
    i chase that mouse
    i set things right to make it look nice
    i spread out books so you might think me wise
    i try and take all the virtues..done with all vice
    i do it all with a smile..just for that twinkle in your eyes..

    i wash the dishes
    i fold the clothes
    i give up my wishes
    i fight my hopes
    i hide rough truths..i speak sugar coated lies
    i do it all with a smile just for that twinkle in your eyes..

    everyday i go through the ordeal
    not once making it a big deal
    you don't care about what i did..
    only about what i did not
    i feel like screaming for i am so agitated
    but all i can do is cry myself to sleep..gosh im so frustrated


    you snap at me all through the day, all the time
    yes i am now grown but so what if i still love to calculate time with that wind chime
    it hurts when you call me useless
    i open my mouth but i am helpless
    it hurts when you chide me for anything and everything
    i cry all night..i wish to fly..oh so high..gimme some air..gimme some wings


    i want to go far away
    far from everybody..
    want to be with nobody
    for i feel sad
    and i get mad
    when i think ..that whatever i do ..
    is never ever going to be enough for you ..
     
  2. Vader

    Vader New Member

    i like how you alternate the subject... i.. then you... then i again
    i like poems which end on a strong note
    one question though
    why are all your poems dark?
     
  3. Vader

    Vader New Member

    btw this is really good too...
    is it yours?

    requesting permission to use in song...
     
  4. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    haha
    umm...coz i write only when i am sad..
    i tried writing when i am in a jolly mood..but i guess at that time..i am too happy to type .. ;)
    i mostly write sad, romantic or rebellious poetry..
    but you never know maybe someday i'd write breaking the boundaries of genres..and show you a happy poem :)
     
  5. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    nah..that's a song by linkin park.."leave out all the rest"
    make it into a song..i'd love to hear it with a diffrent tune..
     
  6. Vader

    Vader New Member

    i was only asking cause even though a band has a genre a lyricist needs to be versatile...
    two poems in fifteen mins?
    you must be awfully depressed :tongue2:
    i'm guessing you write them and save them then post them together?


    but that would be plagiarism if its already a song!!!
     
  7. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    nah i wrote em yesterday..i don't take too long to write so..
    and ther's no strategy..as such..you know..saving and then posting and stuff..
     
  8. Vader

    Vader New Member

    ahhh... but thats what you do isnt it ;)
    anyway point taken
    keep up the good work
     
  9. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member


    thank you :D
     
  10. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    I recently promised myself I wont write (no matter how bright the lines might seem) until I'm sure its not an outburst of anger/sadness/negative emotions. They seem to grow on you, in some time you start liking it, and don't realise until you're deep inside. Problem is you don't even accept the fact.

    But, nice lines.
     
  11. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    aarrree..!!
    then what do i write about?
    i mean..if not about an outburst of my emotions ?

    nyways..thank you :)
     
  12. alpha1

    alpha1 I BLUES!

    Why don't you simply ask the person what he/she wants?

    If there is a mismatch - walk away.
    If there isn't and you don't have any issues - then do only that.
     
  13. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    the poem's not about me :)
     
  14. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    you might write about what you like rather than what you dislike. It'll make you truly appreciate the power of poetry and the effect it has on you. Also its very difficult to write happy words. That'll make it even more special.
     
  15. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member


    but when happy...i like to celebrate..not pick a pen and write happy words..not my forte
     

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