What You Think Is Not.................

Wandering In The Lusty World , I Can`t Recognize Any Face

There `s No Soul In This Earth, Which Is To Be Called Human Race

What You See Is Not What You Take

What You Think Is Not What You Make

What`s The Use Of Complaining , When I Am In Wrong Thoughts

In The Wrong Era, In The Wrong Place

Got Nothing To Recreate Nothing To Seperate

What You See Is Not What You Take

What You Think Is Not What You Make

 

any suggestruion...

 

You use 10 lines to say what you could have said in 2. You need to cut lines out and expand on the concept.

 

thanks ????

 

happy to help.



sings the vodafone song

 

NICE work but still dere is some missing thing in the punch line or i can say in the rhyme..........part also neways... still its a good one.... \m/

 

thanks a lot !!!!!

thanks for your appreciation thanks a lot!!!!!

 

the next one is


only a person can give me the life

can give me my soul and give the smile

i pray a thousand nights

just to find anything right

and happy to make


what you see is not..........................

 

the extended and the new one.......

the next one is


only a person can give me my life

can give me my soul and give thy smile

i pray a thousand nights

just to find anything right

and happy to make


what you see is not..........................