war poem ..

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by har1s, Jan 22, 2006.

  1. har1s

    har1s <b>Untitled</b>

    herez a poem i'd like 2 share wid u ppl... not my work !!


    You stand in a trench of vile stinking mud
    And the bitter cold freezes your blood
    The the guns open up and flames light the sky
    And as you watch, rats go scuttling by.

    The men in the dugouts are quiet for a time
    Trying to sleep midst the stench and the slime
    The moon is just showing from over the hill
    And the dead on the wire hand silent and still.

    A sniper's bulltet wings close to your head
    As u wistfully think of a comfortable bed
    But now a dirty blanket has to suffice
    And more often than not it is crawling with lice.
     
  2. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    im against the war..
    such concepts frightens me...
     
  3. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    nice effort ...war ....raw..awry
     
  4. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    where did u come across it?
     
  5. vishwa_81us

    vishwa_81us Banned

    it brings out the real pic of war.. nicely done.. who ever has done ..
     
  6. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    Hmm..a nice attempt surely!

    but the ending is not really that good..i mean its lil above average..whosoever wrote it with his/her first hand xp with war and bloodshed
     
  7. har1s

    har1s <b>Untitled</b>

    @cryptic... a grade 5 history book of mine...
     

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