walking alone

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by guns_n_gore, Jun 1, 2006.

  1. guns_n_gore

    guns_n_gore hell raiser

    walking alone

    it rained with no worry in the world
    and i walked all sad and wet
    the roads emptyed soon
    and i was alone waliking

    walked upto my door steps
    and i turned back still wet
    children danced in the streets
    there was smiles all around

    it was all about memories
    memroies i lived once
    memories with which i went ahead
    i was still walking

    and i went ahead saw a man
    hurt in the pavement
    gave my hand ot help but did not see it
    and i walked ahead

    and i at last came i belonged
    all i saw was still stones
    and i again laid to rest and
    looked where i just came in
    cemetery gates
     
    guns_n_gore, Jun 1, 2006
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  2. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    nice one..is it ur first poem?
    coz i havent seen u posting b4..anyways reps :)
     
    vini, Jun 1, 2006
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  3. god_of_guitar

    god_of_guitar New Member

    nice poem. reps for u
     
    god_of_guitar, Jun 1, 2006
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  4. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    hey dude, nice to see ur first post here.

    Ok, ur poem is like a jigsaw puzzle, i cant make any sense out of it until u can elaborate on the theme.
    U might have to pay little attention on ur sentence formation and offcourse preposition.

    Rest is kool.

    Do lemme know abt the theme though.

     
    walk_alone, Jun 1, 2006
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  5. guns_n_gore

    guns_n_gore hell raiser

    guns_n_gore, Jun 6, 2006
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  6. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    AMAZINGGGGGG!!!! u should rite more often!:) reps...
     
    #iR@, Jun 6, 2006
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  7. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&*$@*^$

    +1

    reps .....
     
    apurbajd, Jun 6, 2006
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