ek baar yun hi kabhi simat aao mujhe mein kabhi, aarzoo dabe se hai dil mein sun lo abhi intehaa ho chuki hai dil -e -bekaaari ki ab toh, keh do jubaan pe phir se wohi baat abhi abhi. bepanaah mohabbat kiya hai hamne bhi tumse, jaan bhi nisaar kar chale wafa mein tumhare. silsilay mulaaqaaton ke aur yun nazarein churana. wafa tujhse hi kiya iqraar karta hun abhi abhi. tareef khuda ki karein yah husn ke charche, zaalim nighaien zamane ke aur aap ki kaatil aadyein. farishtey bhi kaayal hue hai aap ke ishq mein. dil ki baatein nazron se sunte hain kabhi kabhi. plz comment...: rohit
hmm...i see u improving again rohit.. but stilll lot to say... 1st two para's are going fine wit theme.. but last one sounds bit odd... n plz plz.. while writting poetry take one theme...n describe that throught.. at one time u r pleading girl to be wit u..at next u describe how beautiful she is.. this transition shud be smooth n not abrupt.. so...seeing poetry in those first two stanzas... i say...good efforts...n nice job..
agreed.......it was really misplaced......and thanks for reading and commenting first...... well thanks for words on my improvement.........waywardness of thoughts makes the concept colourless........ rohit
