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Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Garima, Nov 29, 2005.

  1. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Yeh pyar nahi to kya hai???

    A short one aftr a long time :grin:...cudnt think of a title :eek:: agar koi achcha Title dimag me aye toh batana pls :eek::


    Raat si andheri hai yeh zindgi
    par ek umeed ka tara nazar aata hai

    tum or tumhari yeh saadgi
    ek yahi andaaz toh is dil ko bhaata hai

    mera tujhe dekhna or fir dekhte reh jana
    yeh pyar nahi to or kya hai

    tera mujhe dekhna or fir anjaan ban jana
    yeh ada nahi to or kya hai

    ----by Me

    Teri ik nazar bhar ko tarasta hun ,
    jo mil jaati hai agar toh shaam roshan ho jaati hai

    aur na mile jis din teri jhalak,
    palak se aansoo behte hai aur wohi shaam gamgeen ho jati hai

    tu samjhe na samjhe is nazar ki muhabbat ko
    magar yeh nazar tere asar se hi noor paati hai....

    ----by koolstrum

    Tera mujhe dekh ke yun palkein jhukana..
    Bina kuch kahe bahut kuch keh jaana..
    Tere khule baaalon ko yun dekhte reh jaana..
    Dil mein bhare armanon ko bas chupa jana..
    Mere dil tu hi baata...
    Yeh pyar nahi to kya hai..


    Ankhen band karta hun..to tuhi-tu nazar aati hai..
    Ankhen kholun to tu saamne aa jati hai..
    Tere lavon ka chupke se mujhe chu jaana..
    Paas mere aake tera dheere se muskurana..
    Mere dil tu hi baata..
    Yeh Pyar nahi to kya hai...

    -----by Vishwa



    Do comment...good,bad or ugly?
     
  2. abhi_lovespooja

    abhi_lovespooja New Member

    hey garima
    its really a nice one...
    and
    as far as the title is concerned i dont think anyone can suggest better than u...
    plz try to add some more lines in it .... if u can
    m sure when u add some more lines in it u will definately ve one title for this poem
    again no need to appriciate ur work coz
    U R THE BEST.....
    abhi
     
  3. koolstrum

    koolstrum The Chosen One

    Teri ik nazar bhar ko tarasta hun , jo mil jaati hai agar toh shaam roshan ho jaati hai

    aur na mile jis din teri jhalak, palak se aansoo behte hai aur wohi shaam gamgeen ho jati hai

    tu samjhe na samjhe is nazar ki muhabbat ko

    magar yeh nazar tere asar se hi noor paati hai.......
     
  4. har1s

    har1s <b>Untitled</b>

    nice @koolstrum and garima...
     
  5. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    @abhi...harls thanx yaar
    @abhi will try to add few more lines to that....
    @koolsrum....impressive !!
     
  6. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    when u have a secret crush on someone... when ur somebody's secret admirer...... this one fits perfectly :)

    it's really cute :)
     
  7. shak

    shak Harrr!

    lol secret admiration .... i am sure garry doesnt has any such case .. do you garry? .. lol .. half of the world knows by now :) ..
    anyway nice poem .. and guess what? .. i know all the words .. yay!!
    i like the fact that it isnt dark .. and very light hearted .. reps to you buddy!
     
  8. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    @Trish thanks....
    ^^^@yeah Shak u r rite.....when i like some1 the whole world knows bout it.....a lil late :eek:: aftr 7 yrs to b precise :eek::....& this time m sure i wont let the person kno that i like him...if in case i start liking some1 else(i thnk i hv :eek::)
     
  9. vishwa_81us

    vishwa_81us Banned


    Good one Garru.. but.. a bit short.. so thought to add a few lines to it.. let me know if u liked it..

    These are the lines told by the GUY:

    Tera mujhe dekh ke yun palkein jhukana..
    Bina kuch kahe bahut kuch keh jaana..
    Tere khule baaalon ko yun dekhte reh jaana..
    Dil mein bhare armanon ko bas chupa jana..
    Mere dil tu hi baata...
    Yeh pyar nahi to kya hai..


    Ankhen band karta hun..to tuhi-tu nazar aati hai..
    Ankhen kholun to tu saamne aa jati hai..
    Tere lavon ka chupke se mujhe chu jaana..
    Paas mere aake tera dheere se muskurana..
    Mere dil tu hi baata..
    Yeh Pyar nahi to kya hai...


    and title may be : Pyar nahi to kya hai...


    Vishwa :cool:
     
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  10. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    ^^^some1 improving day by day.... :think:
    good job Vish....
     
  11. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    wah! awesome vish... i knew u could write well (i meant serious stuff)!
     
  12. vishwa_81us

    vishwa_81us Banned

    Thanku... thanku... huh !!!! i m now feeling proud of myself.. i m ready to beat javed akhtar.. n gulzar...
     
  13. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    ^^^Amen :)
     

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