Untitled(Some1 Help With Title)

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by bono, Jan 13, 2006.

  1. bono

    bono New Member

    My First Post Here......

    STANDING APPLAUSE/HIDDEN DEVILS
    Come out, Come out
    Where ever you are
    Come from your mansions and shiny new cars
    Come look at the death
    And destruction you caused
    Did you really think you’d get standing applause?

    Did you do it for glory?
    Did you do it for fame?
    Or did you really wish people would spit at your name?
    Do you think you are clever?
    Do you think you are just?
    Or do you really think others are lower than dust?

    You give children guns
    And tell them to shoot
    And you laugh as you look on in your clean-cut suit
    Are you afraid to fight?
    Are you afraid to die?
    Have you ever seen war with your own two eyes?

    You say they play dirty
    Cheating at your game
    But who’s there to call out when you do the same?
    You kick them down
    And you laugh as they fall


    Come out, Come out
    Where ever you are
    Come from your mansions and shiny new cars
    Come look at the death
    And destruction you caused
    Did you really think you’d get standing applause?

    Andy
     
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  2. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    well a brilliant poem there..lemme rattle my grey cells for the title:-

    ~ The curse of Opulents
    ~ Who needs your glory
    ~ Cold/Callous Nobility


    thats all i can come up wid..will post if anything else strikes me
    reps for u!
     
  3. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    Awesome!! absolutely loved it...

    i suck at choosing titles :eek:: sorry

    but, really good work there!!
     
  4. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Nice work Andy......it reminds me of my poem 'To A Killer....' that I wrote few months back....reps coming ur way from me too :beer: ...enjoy:)

    Title...??? m bad at it too...:eek::
     
  5. esgallindeion

    esgallindeion Minstrel Knight

    Excellent.. I liked it... somehow it reminds me of James Blunt lyrics, only much better... But him singing it would give the right emotional touch.

    Titles? I suck at titles too. But anyway, how about -

    1. New World Performance
    2. Is This Your Stage / Are you standing onstage
    3. Come Out ... ;P
     
  6. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Suggestions:-

    Let the Curtain fall
    Behind the Scene..
    Master of Puppets..

    nice poem..and it did remind me of something similar i've read before
     
  7. esgallindeion

    esgallindeion Minstrel Knight

    Please! No!
     
  8. UjSen

    UjSen *#!EVIL*!!

    u should turn tat into a song>
    definetly>
     
  9. bono

    bono New Member

    thanx for ur good replies guys and girls
    i am thinkin of keeping the title

    Standing Applause
     
  10. guitarangela

    guitarangela gran'ma

    awesome work yaar.........for titles, i suck big time too......anyway, i hope suggestions wouldn't hurt as well... :dance: ......
    1)Realize to rescue!
    2)Diminishing Glory
    3)The cursed nobility.....
     
  11. UjSen

    UjSen *#!EVIL*!!

    how about>


    standing applause>
     
  12. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    lol..knew someone would object:p:
     
  13. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    standing applause4u..
    excellent..
    reps to u...
     
  14. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    GREATTTTT!!!!!! veryy nicely ritten! reps comming ur way man! :beer: i think u should name it:

    "hidden devils"
     
  15. Nanda

    Nanda Bassist

    hey the lines ...
    Come out, Come out
    Where ever you are
    reminds me of this movie Queen of the damned ... My frnd likes those lines alot and keeps repeating them ....
     
  16. bono

    bono New Member

    Thanx everybody for such wonderful replies
    u guys and girls r very inspiring!!!
     

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