untitled poem

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by browneyegurlie, Jan 21, 2005.

  1. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    A broken mirror,
    my reflection so empty
    lacking any sense of colour and beauty.
    The tears so salty
    forming pools of depression.
    The chains supress me from any expression.
    Tied to the ground I look around,
    sensing laughter and sound.
    The flashes of colour strike by me,
    the desire for you multiplies.
    These lips so dry and motionless,
    screaming for one last try.
    My hand reaches out and touches the air,
    grasping anything left there.
    My soul collapses inside,
    wanting freedom from these locks,
    wishing and waiting for that door to open.
     
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  2. ananth222

    ananth222 Beginner

    very nice...!
     
  3. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    lol thank u
     
  4. jayswami

    jayswami Blue J

    Is it about a fish? :think:
     
  5. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    lol no it isnt but that ur interpretation:p
     
  6. rizaaj

    rizaaj Forum Leader

    nice one gurlie...

    but u mentioned that u used lip balm ... still ur lips are dry???
     
  7. jayswami

    jayswami Blue J

    my interpretation:

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    A broken mirror,
    my reflection so empty
    <damn they broke the acquarium>

    lacking any sense of colour and beauty.
    The tears so salty
    forming pools of depression.

    <fish is crying, u broke its home>


    The chains supress me from any expression.
    Tied to the ground I look around,
    sensing laughter and sound.

    <its struggling to breathe wriggling around.. the chains are a metaphor here...
    how dare u laugh at its predicament :mad: >

    The flashes of colour strike by me,
    the desire for you multiplies.
    These lips so dry and motionless,
    screaming for one last try.

    < of course its lips are dry.. u broke the acquarium dammit! >

    My hand reaches out and touches the air,
    grasping anything left there.

    <poor fish is delirious, thinks it has hands.. of course there is no water in the air.. so it doesnt grasp anything>

    My soul collapses inside,
    wanting freedom from these locks,
    wishing and waiting for that door to open.

    <may the poor fish's soul rest in peace>

    hows that browneyedgirl?
     
  8. tejas

    tejas ..........

    ^Funny. But jokes aside, i thought ur poem was realy good. Keep up the good work. What was the inspiration behind this though?
     
  9. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    @jayswami lol loving the intrepretation! it made me laugh:D lol
    @tejas..i tend to write poems usually wen i'm kinda sad or watever or they just come to me!lol...sumtimes i just feel the world is moving around me and i'm stood still with no part in it etc.

    lol i sound soo depressed now lol i'm quite happy but then theres a side from me which is kinda confused
     
  10. Dhoon Master

    Dhoon Master New Member

    Now to decide Tejas or Jayswami :think: :band: :band:
     
  11. rockboyteek

    rockboyteek New Member

    Cool

    hey cool poem !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    @jayswami..........i think u may need to meet a psyciatrist ( if thats how u spell it:p:) :think:

    ill try finding u one! :p:
     
  12. madhura

    madhura pani poori yum yum ....

    you are in your teens yet and are a girl... so have right to get confused ;)
    :p:
    i still do sometimes ;) especially with wierd posts on igt :p:
     
  13. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    lol true:D...........
     
  14. skaw

    skaw snooze

    don't have much words to express myself , so i ll just go with ... nice and a good job :) (you're 5 months older than me , i guess that is why i have a confused side )
     
  15. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    lol thank u...
     
  16. Subhro

    Subhro Argentina lost :&quot;(

    @ brown-ye :shock: nice poem... if u need the tabs leme know :)

    @ Jay :shock: poor fish :shock:
    nice xplanation.. that was height of innovativeness.. u didnt ask 4 ny rep.. wud hav given u some.. :)
     
  17. @jays yeah thought it was abt a fish lolz
    nice one though browneye
     
  18. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    lol well my friend makes his own music but he has no lyrics to go with it soo i mite show him this and c wat he thinks! lol yeh i am loving the fish but my friend, neil, wasnt too impressed!lol but then again he did have a laugh about it
    @subhro the shocked face looked to me like u didnt like it or sumthing...i mite b worng then again.
    @tgf thank u
     
  19. Subhro

    Subhro Argentina lost :&quot;(

    u r wron :)

    the shockd face was coz i didnt know u write poems too.. it was a good 1 :)
     
  20. maverick8218

    maverick8218 New Member

    That sounds like my kinda poem... mello, depressed, lonely, sad, etc., etc. anyway good work browneygurlie.
     

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