-Untimely Life-

First of all.. REALLY sorry for not replying before

Your usage of words is amazing, I absolutely loved this poem.

It's extraordinary, really

 

Thanks dear
.......Thanks a zillion tonnes...

 

no "DNR" signs tagged to this thread!
its my Last poem i guess.......
But I'm still Awaiting Comments people..

 

hard to understand.... but once u understand it the poem is great...

 

Thanks dear...
i feel quite uneasy until and unless i get a proper review to my poem..
that includes people asking the reason why a particular example was used
or why a particular word was used..or why was this compared to that..
i wouldnt mind answering them..
but guess its quiet easy for many as the answers are in the poem itself..

The main motive was to "disguise" the underlying theme and "mask" the emotions through the use of "heavy" words as some may term them as..
i agree that some of the words could've been simpler and would make the poem easily comprehendable.

Diffrent people may have different perceptions about this poem
i wont spoil the fun by letting out the real thing
i think i should add a glossary so it would be a little easy

thanks dear..
about this poem being the last
Well.....
maybe its the last one i'll be posting ....still a bit unsure..anwys..
Thanks again <3

 

Thanks Nimisha

Hey what was hard in the poem?
i could explain if you want!

PS- Meanings added..

 

Very well written Bubz.. Took a lotta time for me to grasp it .. but its worth it .. I reckon da complexity in da poem is directly as a result of da complexity of ur emotions while writing this .. infact I believe .. rock on BUD!! :beerbob: :beer:

Malign is an adjective as well .. da context decides its meanin .. so it fits fine for me ..

 

Well .. I can very well remember who said dat



n I still stick to it :

 

Thanks!!
Like it when you call me bubz
*wishes there was a blushing smiley*

I appreciate you reading my poem..
my poems mean a lot to me..and i always look forward to honest comments

Thanks again dear..
and ther sure is too much of complexity when it comes to emotions

 

^ boy! dats .......extraordinary work bubbly ...... thugh had to read quite a few times....... btw wats wid ur last posting yaar?......

and wats with the RIP for this thread in ur siggy???

 

okay, since you're nice enough to give explanations...I wanted a few. One suspicion that I had might actually answer all of them


Is this, in some places, a cleverly aimed dig at astrology?

 

Not intentional..
but now that you ask me that
lines like

Thou shall repose in the earth.
The skies foretold
Yes, thou shall repose in the earth.
and some others,
may make a person think that way

You can ask me more questions if you want...
i'll definitly give you the explanations

 

Thanks Apu!
R.I.P coz soon it'l be down in the rubble
and no one may read when i'm gone
and this is supposedly my last poem on IGT

Thanks again for commenting on my poem dear!

 

Beautiful imagery in the last two lines here...almost gives me goose pimples. Explain away. I didn't understand it considering that the answer to my last question is in the negative.

A bale here refers to a bale of cotton and not evil, I presume? I figured this probably meant a death of spirit but not of life....? Not sure though.

This is where it almost makes sense to me but not quite. At the last line, I finally thought I understood that "they" was always the folklore but then I lost all co-relation with the rest of the verse and then my head finally exploded and I gave up. I'll come back to this later again.

 

Firstly i'll try to explain the poem ..
try coz it may not be exactly what the poem depicts and what some people perceive

its the journey of a "being".. (one can call it mythological, fictional, or real)

(Overlook the hap-hazard explanation..i'm going line by line)
starts of with its slow death..
going into the past and remembering things..
when it knew death would be coming soon , as its been cursed
as usual it then hides its true emotions with a disguise/mask..
all the sign/signs said the same
then begins its final journey, the funeral rite (obsequy)
zephyr (cool wind) ruffles the veil, thats when "we" get a peek into the coffin and see the present condition of the "being"
requiescat ((R.I.P- prayer for repose) doesnt always mean that the soul Will definitly Rest in Peace
brandishing or exhibiting the cancer (yh..evn this may seem astrological)
but here the curse is compared to a cancer...

bale used in context of a mummified corpse which looks no less than a tied up bundle..

since the body would perish in the earth, the soul would return as an unpleasant folklore..and it would live on...

let me know if i've left out something

 

It's scary how you were on a totally different wavelength here. You've cleared up a lot here and I'll keep asking you other stuff as it comes to my head. I'm a bit tired now.


If by "being", you mean soul then I've pretty much understood a lot. I think this wasn't as coherent as your earlier one (or perhaps I got lucky with the other one) but it's a real creation. I can almost feel that a lot of you has gone into this. Some really great lines. I bow to thee.

 

y do u have such thoughts i mean what made u think like this...jaroor batana haan...

 

you can ask me any questions about this poem whenever you wont..
and i'm no supreme being that you bow to me

well manu...
jus thought of writing something different..
i didnt decide that i would write in a certain manner
jus put together a mixture of emotions in a short story
does that answer your question?

 

it did but.....leave it......u know echo na..vo barr barr sound ka laut ke aana....

bas ye keh kar ki kuch nahi...
jab bhi mere paas se gaya koi....
shak bana rehta hai aksar mujhe
kuch "echo" sa kar rahi hai usski ankahi....

even if different y will a girl in her twentys write with soooooooooooo minute details of a subject like death @#$@#$@#$