Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by astroguru26, Jan 25, 2006.

  1. astroguru26

    astroguru26 New Member


    a bit off- bit again..comments plz

    controlled the sobbing
    hold my faith
    dad left us
    saw the horror of mom getting blazed
    in prayer room

    watched my mom burnt body
    charred totally,helplessly
    she looks differnt in that white robe
    so serious when tied to legs and hand

    not allowed to take a final glimpse
    hold my wailing

    thought what will world say if i show my tears...

    love died in arms of mine,
    taking the dreams with her...

    suicide again ....tormented me

    screaming was no option
    scars has to heal one day thought
    moved ahead

    i never cried
    walked where dead bodies lying
    feel they are smiling on me..

    for missing the chance to show the world i have heart too....

    the heart that can cry for the person u adore

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  2. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    death is the greatest sorrow on the earth..
    i lost my few loved ones too recently.... hurts like hell!!
    rohit u write too much bout pain.....
  3. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    hmm.. i wish you didnt make so many gawdamn grammatical mistakes coz other than that, i love the poem....
  4. Petunia

    Petunia terminally dorky

    Deep man!!
    Real nice. Gloomy and emotional. Love this stuff. Hits u hard in the guts..not like the lovey dovey stuff :) You keep this up, rohit!! :rock:

    @ nimisha: Im terribly sorry for your loss. Just lost someone a couple of days ago as well. Something inside you dies with them. Hope you feel better soon!
  5. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    Not to be insensitive or emo but....I've always believed that something of them lives on with me.

    Think about it....a habit you might have picked up or some way that they have influenced or shaped you will always remind you of them. e.g.- I do not smoke, drink or do drugs because a friend of mine who did lives on in me.
  6. astroguru26

    astroguru26 New Member

    @nimi..........death is the biggest truth of life.......we cannot escape the reality..we have to loose our dearones one day.....life has its rule and we are just followers of our destiny

    @cryptic_angel......the mistakes makes us to learn and i feel nice to acknowledge my mistakes..

    @petunia...my imagination stops on the lovey-dovey type..death/sadness.hoplessness comes natural for me....may be mine tends to be inclined to those philosophical syndrome

    thanks to all for nice comments........

  7. the_wizard

    the_wizard Omega == God

    Brilliant stuff

    @bjr...dude I actually gave up smoking after a friends' death :'(
  8. ElysiaN

    ElysiaN d@Rk\/\/@|\|deReR

    gr8 work....
  9. Petunia

    Petunia terminally dorky

    That is commendable..really. :) I would really have been proud of you had u been my friend...
    You rock!!!

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