Here life comes at that very stage where my destiny is decided on every page Everything wiered and strange particularly me, need a change certainly, now it's silly to say i need my mother's lap to lay my steps are at a very delicate point two sticks attached me, standing on the joint.
12 lines........said more den........12 pages........gud thing do come in small packages........nicely crafted.....liked it. Bt y dat title......didnt get it...
^^^ well i suggest something simple like "Life" or "That stage... " or probably....."Dat part of my life" but nevr "Umm..." it sounds funky or erotic, which d poem is not
ree baba agar jyada thoughts nahin hain to andaze bayaan to ho... where is the art ? dont want to soudn harsh but " this was non-sense"
It's really nice. too good. Dude i think Angira writes too food and this one makes a lot of sense... tho not to be harsh but yours are completly bakwaas.
Hmmm...I'm amazed to see how many people understand poems.I for one,couldn't make much sense out of any poem, unless written by me. I read this and I didn't know what it meant.If you do understand poems,why not just appreciate it a bit more than "nicely written" and stuff?Not that that's bad,but that doesn't help poets anyway. @Poet : Now I'm guessing you meant to describe your crossroads in life,the point where you choose either of the routes and never look back.I found it to be a mediocre attempt (that's not an insult,really) ..I've read quite a few on this theme.Some elongated, some shorter than yours.What made it stand out as such was the fact that you mentioned that hoped you could have loved one to help you out (your mother).The end was quite good.The "two sticks" part was new for me.Other than that,its nothing new. This of course,is just my interpretation.I have no idea what you had in mind.
now whoz A2Z if u want to say some thing ...u have to post some creation of urs...lol....otherwise i dont agree...!!
i just read n appreciate the good ones..... dunno if i really can write..... u can prove me wrong when u really post a kool one. soory Angira for crippin spam.. u r awesome.
n u will drench when i rain so dont sit under my shadow coz u will cry and render pain this is no rap.. prolly a crap
