U turn me on...

Dear All,


First time i m trying to write something erotic.. so plz don't laugh.. go with the mood..


Drops of water sliding from ur neck..
U can't see me.. staring at u from the back
It was a rainy day of summer last year..
without ur knowledge i was there..

U closed the doors and window..
as if u were getting ready for the show..
U didn't notice that i was hiding behind the door..
I was so excited as I always wanted to see u more..

U were getting ready to take a warm shower..
i saw u walking towards the bathroom with hands full of flower..
U left the bathroom door open..
U never knew wats going to happen..

Inside the bathroom i saw u getting nude slowly..
something in me was getting hard abruptly..
unknowingly u threw ur clothes on my face..
U can now imagine my heart was beating at wat pace..


Bathtub filled with warm water was ready to take u in..
I watched u sitting and then lean..
U closed ur eyes and started to moan..
as if I was touching u.. on and on...


I saw u full.. i saw u the whole..
I had only the heart.. that also u stole..
I watched u moan..moan.. and moan..
This was the first time.. Baby.. u turned me on...



Frnds i m really new in poetry.. so plz help.. by ur comments.. Crypti.. howz that..

I composed it last nite.. dedicated to the girl who rules my fantasies..


Vishwa

 

LMAO :RollLol:




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**still rolling**

Abnormally....hehehehehe.....is is tilted towards either side....lmao....

 

Oh cypher !!! I didn't mean that.. no other word was going in rhyme there.. don't worry yaar evrything is normal.. :beer:

 

hahahha...
:RollLol:

thats amazing....

 

message frm jekyll

btw all this timwe...how the hell cud u resist....koi aur hota to chaloo ho jaata....either haathgaadi or maalgadi :

 

oh ssslayer.. where r u i m really missing ur posts.. wen r u going to come back..

 

well, stalkin and invading some1's privacy like that is a crime u know!! lol...

i really dunno what else to say!

 

Come on i was not making any MMS clip there..

is it a crime even if its the girl u love most.. and the girl also loves that.. I wud rather call it romance.. and that moment romantic.. I think love is not full without romance... and if u r romantic then u need to be a bit naughty..


anyway.. leave that ..its just a poem.. have i improved in my writting skills :
was that really erotic.. :think:

 

idhar to kuch hard nahi hua......infact it was funny...


but its ok....keep writing....u are better than me

 

u rock man...
this was too good ...simplicity is difficult to handle....but u did it well :beer: :beer:

 

Thanx.. Madhuresh.. Wizzy.. ssslayer.. Ansh.. Crypti.. I m now thinking to write something more.. I feel i can also write.. but I know i m using simple words... i need to try some tough words.. but i m poor in vocab :

 

its not about using tough words...its all about arranging words...using proper words at proper time...and above else....wen ur writing such poems...sensuous ones....U have to write it like a story....the one reading it should feel a part of it...then only the reader will feel smthing getting hard :



and im worse in vocab...read my blog for instance...the best example of crappy vocab :beer:

 

Thanx wizzy for that guidance.. i will keep writing...

Well.. on the naughty side... The reader may be female i think.. :think:

 

hmm I am representing male junta...let sm female speak on wht they will feel

 

hmmm 21st century females r shy to reply anything in this thread.. : ok leave it..

 

that was like reading a p*** movie .. :S
but i reckon you could have done more .. i mean .. one doesnt get many chances like these! haha
nice effort .. looking forward to getting some more from you ..

 

I liked it...

 

donno why but the poem reminds me of Khushwant Singh!!! :shock:
its okish..u could write on better topics
or if your more comfortable writing on this stuff..

poems are poems after all

PS--- Tarun Tejpal has been short-listed for some Bad *** in fiction Award...

 

that was simply funny ....laughing thru out :RollLol:
A nice try @ poetry though

 

I liked it dude ..... though it didnt make nething hard........