Trying Hard

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by shanky666_, Jan 12, 2006.

  1. shanky666_

    shanky666_ New Member

    Hey there...After the controversial poem "The Selfish Heart" i'm back again with this writing of mine. It shows the helplessness.

    I curse the wind that brought you back,
    when I was trying so hard,
    to get you out of my mind.

    seems forgetting you may take a long-long time,
    so what will I do,
    if I ran short of life?

    I'll do one thing, I think that will work,
    that I'll keep a stone,
    on my shadow.

    And then I'll run so fast, so fast that I fall,
    untill my shadow,
    is unable to follow.

    But even that seems tough, & really may not work,
    coz I've seen a freak,
    doing that one day.

    But all he got, was some bruises & pain,
    with his shadow still there,
    right there to stay.

    So even I may fall & may even get some pain,
    But atleast I'll learn,
    not to love again.

    Not to lose my heart, not to be so good,
    no more sentiments,
    no more lovely games.
    nimisha, BubblyMartini and Garima like this.
  2. #iR@


    i don't know but i find this poem sweet... i think cause of the shadow part! hehe.... anyway good job man! great thinking! :)
  3. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    reps for you....for the sake of these lines....just Loved them.
  4. UjSen

    UjSen *#!EVIL*!!

    Good thinking
  5. shanky666_

    shanky666_ New Member

    thanks for the time u gave to me....hey where's cryptic angel? havn't head about her for long eh!
  6. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    loved the lines
    "seems forgetting you may take a long-long time,
    so what will I do,
    if I ran short of life?"

    good dimension to things people see in diffrent ways

    reps for u dude:)
  7. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    sorry for the late reply :eek::

    some of those lines were really well thought of!

    nice poem :)
  8. shanky666_

    shanky666_ New Member

    hey guys... back after a very very very very loooong time.... wish ya all a gr8n diwali.

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