tribute to che

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by wolfblitz, Nov 23, 2005.

  1. wolfblitz

    wolfblitz New Member

    arbit poem guys,first attempt......


    nascent from a blue womb,
    promised was he a blue tomb,
    nay he said to all their pearls,
    revolutionize i will this world!

    schooled though in medicine he was,
    to give up his life for a lost cause,
    he scouted the land on his norton 500,
    to restore faith to the hearts that were sundered.

    battling the elements,he forged ahead,
    some more shrapnel,another comrade dead!
    all this while to forget the searing pain,
    he refreshed his memory to feel that rage again.

    an eye for an eye and a limb for a limb,
    his guerilla technique finally wore thin,
    only to spawn a new breed of warriors,
    who put to rest the capitalist's desires.
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  2. wolfblitz

    wolfblitz New Member

    not too difficult to comprehend i suppose
  3. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    i really dont know much abt the guy who u have written the poem abt :eek:: so maybe that's why i couldnt appreciate it much... :eek::

    but it's really nice to read such a different poem and as for the the way it has been written, GRRRREEAAT job!! :)

    i hope ur writing more poems, do post em here

  4. wolfblitz

    wolfblitz New Member

    thanx a million cryptic.....
    ill try to diversify as far as the plot of the poem is concerned
  5. tejas

    tejas ..........

    I liked it. Good job. Though I thought the last line distrupts the flow a bit. Keep writing!
  6. dennis

    dennis The Bhangra King

    i loved, i wish i had a Rage type of band, i wud have definately "used"(read plagiarised) those lyrics:p
    che was one awesome person.
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  7. wolfblitz

    wolfblitz New Member

    hey thanks dude,u can def use it if u wanna altho i dont really think itd fit into a song.
    i thought it makes more sense coming up with the song first n then the lyrics
    im trying to fit them in2 one of our compsitions too but havent been successful as yet
  8. wolfblitz

    wolfblitz New Member

    thanks tejas, about the flow i guess ur right i got a lil too impatient to finish it off towards the end
    will be a lil more patient the next time...
    and hey....great job on the tool review, PARABOLA is a brillllllliiiiiiiaaaaaaaannnnnnt song
    am starting to like tool now....must say the drummer n bassist merit a million kudos
  9. dennis

    dennis The Bhangra King

    ohh hell, the lytricswill fit in perfectly( edxcept the last line though) ..i need someone who can sing this in an angry rebellios manner, thatta be perfect...
  10. guns_n_gore

    guns_n_gore hell raiser

    @wolf u rock more than ....
  11. shak

    shak Harrr!

    this one packs a mighty punch!!! ... good one

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