In the cold dark corner Comfort, is not what I seek All alone with my thoughts And cobwebs of memories In the shadows today, I choose to remain. Is it okay, If I shine tomorrow? I try to cry But in vain I rest my troubled head On the cold window pane My turmoil today, I choose not to explain. Is it okay, If I cry tomorrow? This shell around me I ache to shatter I suffocate But does it even matter? The strength today, I do not have. Is it okay, If i break tomorrow? To forgive myself Is what I pray to learn Else, though I'm frozen now Tomorrow I might burn Death today, Is what I yearn. Is it okay, If I'm reborn tomorrow?
beautifully written dude....i kinda loved da third verse is dis ur blog btw https://o3.indiatimes.com/notsocryptic/archive/2005/05/22.aspx i found da poem over there too :
LOL ... seems to be a genuine case ... unlike Screwdriver ... kudos to u cryptic_angel ... i always feel that poems tell a great deal about what the person is undergoing at that particular time ... nice one ...
i meant.. yeah, dats my blog but i've stopped writin there..... u can check out my current blog tho at https://o3.indiatimes.com/darkangel anyways.. thnx!
This is exactly why I love flipping back through the old pages of this forum... A wonderful write.The end of each stanza is so compelling..seriously,I'm out of words... The phrases are excellent and they simply add details to the situation.. e.g "Comfort, is not what I seek All alone with my thoughts And cobwebs of memories In the shadows today, I choose to remain. " I repeat,great. The only thing I failed to understand is why is she/he not willing to to change today??If you do read this,I would really like to know why..And again I'm assuming she's asking all this to herself,isn't she? I did not appreciate the phrase "is it okay?" because it causes a conflict of opinion (considering the reader is being asked)..I mean I would say,no its not okay if you change tomorrow b'coz tomorrow shows uncertainty..if you want something done..do it today.But then some1 may say its okay.This of course,is assuming she's not addressing herself,in which case the above lines are meaningless.
To answer the question (even though its not mine to answer, just my interpretation)... Change requires strength and will. The potrayal here is of a person whose walls have crumbled. Sometimes you want to take a moment before you move on.
^^No,you see I got the fact that she can't change today...its the question that bothers me...why does she ask "is it okay?" it sounds as if she wants permission (which seems a bit unnecessary,esp. if it is asked to the readers)..sort of like she's capable of changing but yet she wants approval (which contradicts your opinion). And forgive me for just assuming the character is a she but I don't know why I'm urged to believe its a she..