Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by #iR@, Feb 7, 2006.

  1. #iR@


    hello..... heres another poem i rote... hope u guys like it and like always looking forward to ur comments and suggesstions! btw i was really pissed wen i rote this... tried not to be rude in this poem but anyway... here goes...

     This isn’t u!

    Who the hell do u think u r?
    everytime I trust u
    u stab me in the back
    u insult me infront of them
    and u think u r kool?
    I hate u this way
    I know this is not u but someone else
    Someone I abhor
    Someone I don’t know
    Leave me alone
    And let me go
    Cause I can’t stand u this way!
    U were someone who I cared for
    But never got anything in return
    All u have done for me
    Is made me believe
    That I can’t trust anyone again
    And u r the ONLY one to blame!

    thanks for reading..... commets plzz :cool:
    $cReWdR!veR, nimisha and Amanush... like this.
  2. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Hey Hira.

    To be very honest it sounds as if u r talking to someone and are very mad at him.
    u must be feeling gud after letting it all out.

  3. #iR@


    @ walk_alone... thanks for reading. yea man was really pissed! :mad: but now i am all go0d! :p:
  4. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    anger not a good thing babe...its not a poem but but more of a reaction..:)
  5. cruithne_86

    cruithne_86 New Member

    well when i read it .. it sounded more like rock in ruff
    we just have to repeat few word such as i trust you trust you
    you stabed me stabed.. i hate you hate you
    and it would be nice rock ..
    you can let you anger go out with strumming on guitar
    and screm this rock song like nething
    well thats wat music should be like .. expressing feelings..
  6. #iR@


    @ madhuresh... chalo atleast u read it! :cool: thanks!

    @ cruithne_86... thanks for ur ideas... :)
  7. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    good job of venting your feelings babe...:)
  8. #iR@


    @ bubbly...thanks! :)
  9. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    i guess with you writin this one...the person concerned has got a life...varna uska kya hotha hoga :think:

    its better not to hurt even those who have hurted you.

    better way is to ignore. realisation of ones' mistakes are quicker this way. either ours or theirs. and things shall fall into place.:beer:
  10. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    Too much anger... takes you nowhere. :)
  11. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    Well i read the poem without reading any comment and what i feel is that if you treat usage of "u" in the poem as "innerself" then its a battle with you only, a battle that is necessary to make you strong.

    just my idea....
  12. #iR@


    @ sharmontime... thanks! :)

    @ knight_ki_gf... yea i know... but had to take it somehow! thanks!

    @ amit... thanks! :)
  13. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    its nice u pour out ur anger this way...but u can do better than this...keep writing..:)
  14. Amanush...

    Amanush... Tanha Rahi...!

    Awesome write...! Reps for you :)

    Take care


  15. #iR@


    @ hardik... thanks fro reading man! :)

    @ amunush... thanks for the reps man! :)
  16. sweetie

    sweetie New Member

    Hmmm..venting out all your frustration..good good...
    But my dear dont be so angry as its injurious to your health and the best thing you did was write it down which is great...
    keep it up:rock:
  17. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    hehe.. very avril lavigne :grin:

    but good nonetheless!
  18. #iR@


    @ sweetie... thanks... :)

    @ cryptic... lol... yea i know... waisay this poem is so not my type. thanks! :)
  19. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Writing poems is the best way of letting ur frustation out.....:rock:
  20. $cReWdR!veR

    $cReWdR!veR .:: Sweetheart ::.

    nice one...

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