hello everyone.... back with another poem... this one is more like a dreamy sort of a poem... no human cry... no worries... : but its about nature! hehe... i think it's incomplete... don't know but just feel that way... anyway... looking forward to ur comments like ALWAYS! hope u guys enjoy it! here goes..... There’s so much to see Have u ever seen the stars In the middle of the nite Shining bright With all their might Have u ever seen the water Flowing down the mighty mountains Making its way through its torturous journey And then flowing into the calm sea Have u ever seen the sky After a rain Forming a rainbow With the same colours every time Have u ever seen a bird Flying high Looking for its prey To feed his child thanks all of u for reading.... don't foget to comment!
hira... i always feel...... u have got that good imagination...infact great... just u need more power to develop it into poetry... keep thinking..u gonna br great thinker one day... the poem was good btw...
i saw rainbow....and i have a kabutar family in my balcony.........jus delivered a baby kabootar...someboady call the ^^ doc......
:cry1: :cry1: :cry2: this baby kabutar is fidaa over my padosi chiknaa human kabutar.... :secret: shhhhhhhh... dont tell this to my daddy kabutar....!
(u asked 4 comments).....what was this poem was it going somewhere stars...shining.."bright"... With all their might ..ok then water should flow with the last drop of strenth to reach and should be enthusiastic ...but no, its a tortourous journey..chalo now sky with same colours....monotony eagle or bird ....eager/anxious... janemann kyaaa chupaa rahi hooo vo to kahooo
hhmmm...... weird replies as i predicted on this poem... :think: anyway... thanks for reading... : @ nimisha... thanks! @ madhuresh... :shock: thanks all for ur honest comments...
hmmm well written .. good ideas ... and appreciation of nature! well < it can never turn out bad so its a good try over all .. now for some criticism .. (this is the first time i am doin that for you isnt it?) well i felt .. the poem ended without any final say .. it sounds like you were sayin your poem and was stopped in the middle by your mom callin you for the dinner .. there should have been a disitinct finish ... but anyway .. doesnt matter really ... good on ya hira
@ shak.... thanks for ur honest comments.... well... i totally agree wid the poem being incomplete.... thats the reason why i even rote in the start that it was incomplete... hehe @ disturbed.... thanks for reading!
