The Silent Goodbye </3

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Poison..., Sep 24, 2011.

  1. Poison...

    Poison... New Member

    The dark crescent moon gleamed,
    We stood there, something to say
    Those choked words and lost thoughts dismissed
    Fleeting glances, frosty eyelids
    We slipped into the trance in each other’s eyes.

    Silent words leaking out my sorrow,
    Your fluttering sighs I resented,
    Howling in the distance, my pain echoed,
    Silence everywhere
    My soft words merging wrong and right
    A stand still all around,
    My soft words slipping into the night

    Why can’t you feel it? That building pain,
    That smile lingering on; oblivious.
    Oblivious to an unknown oblivion ahead,
    A cause of that so familiar,
    Your wound in me, mirrored.

    That disbelief in your eyes, that fear,
    That twinkle...disappears.

    Weeping moon veiled by the shadows,
    I still stood there, something to say
    Those choked words and lost thoughts dismissed
    Silence...and she walked away.
     
  2. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    i love the way u make any of your poems visual..they have a diffrent sort of impact..nice..!! :D
     
  3. Poison...

    Poison... New Member

    Thanks. I actually love doing that, i mean im good at that. It takes me ages to actually pick a topic to write on. I guess i still have to learn in that aspect of writing. The ability to write about almost anything.

    Thank you, though. :)
     
  4. ^ awsome poem !!

    what else must i say ...noo words
     
  5. Poison...

    Poison... New Member

    Thank you very much. :D
     
  6. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    how do you LEARN aspects of writing.. ?!?! :O
     
  7. Poison...

    Poison... New Member

    Reading, experience, ideas, reflection.

    Just keep writing, and you'll learn.
     
  8. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    hmm... ok ..ill keep that in mind.. :)
     

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