The Old Maple

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  1. folkpoet80

    folkpoet80 New Member

    I wrote this minor ballad in November. I'm trying to compose a tune for it. May be D minor would work..


    The Old Maple

    Where the long river flows
    Where mountains reach the sky
    Where the old maple grows
    Where eagles fly high

    I dream of such a place
    Where there's none but You and I
    A place for us to live
    A place for us to die

    By the orchard in the cottage
    I'd lay me in your arms
    While the winds whisper softly
    Getting lost in your charms

    While the seasons pass by
    Together, we would stay
    Chasing our own dreams
    We will find our way

    I wish to see you, Dear
    Oh, smiling all the while
    So come and take my hand
    And we'll walk the lovers' mile

    In the hills of Himalayas
    I've seen a paradise
    Like the light of happiness
    I've seen in your eyes

    While the snow softly falls
    'Cross the panes of my heart
    Your love will keep me warm
    Knowing we would never part

    There's a place that I know
    In the valley so green
    I swear to you my love
    There's a place you've never seen

    Where dreams do come true
    Where memories never die
    Where I long to be with you
    Where there's none but You and I.

    Gautam Dhar
    29 November 2005
    Lansing MI
     
  2. uj_6string

    uj_6string Nickelodean Addict :D

    beautiful!!!!
    really nice!:beer:....i still remember your "just another song"....
    you are awesome man....keep it up!!!
    i got one of ma friends to read it...and she says....
     
  3. folkpoet80

    folkpoet80 New Member

    Thanks string. And thank your friend for her comments!
    GD
     
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  4. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Really nice one GD....perfect to b composed to mk it a song...m sure it wud turn up to b very sweet....
    Reps for u.....
     
  5. folkpoet80

    folkpoet80 New Member

    Thank you for reading, Garima.
    -G
     
  6. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    ya mast hai........
    In the hills of Himalayas
    I've seen a paradise
    Like the light of happiness
    I've seen in your eyes
    ye kaun si jagah ka zikr kiya hao dost...is it masosrrie ...ya masori masuri...jo bhi ho vo dheradun ke upar jo hill station hai vo haio kyaa ?
     
  7. folkpoet80

    folkpoet80 New Member

    Thanks for reading Madhuresh. I am not referring to any place in general, but to the overall divinity and spiritual being of the great Himalayas. I did visit Ranikhet in Summer 05, which I thought of while writing the song.
     
  8. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME

    no confusions.. ur the best here :beer:

    i will take a step to sing this evn if u kill me....

    Blue ridged mountains .. moutain momma .. take me home..
     
  9. folkpoet80

    folkpoet80 New Member

    Thanks, Sachoo. Appreciate the comment. Go ahead and compose if you want. I'm probably going to do it this weekend myself.
     
  10. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    u hv a big heart my brother.... m singing it right frm as i read it... but hey u always say tht u r gng to do it on weekend. post ur country roads yaar.
     
  11. folkpoet80

    folkpoet80 New Member

  12. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    sorry yaar.. it's not opening.. NM .. do compose ur amazing words
     
  13. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    hey gautam, yaar my evry thing revolves aroung G,D and C (or Em). This is wat i figured in half n hr today. Basically song is sounding a bit more like country song (sorta don mclean stuff..) .. jeeeeez .... tho there's a bit of screaming n high pitch voices... however i m looking for kinda genre of Incubus, 911 or boyzone etc....

    This is wat i figured but i think m gonna change a loads. will sit again this weekend.. hey u can hv goood bothered long weekend this time ;)


    G.................................
    Where the long river flows
    Am...................................
    Where mountains reach the sky
    G...................................
    Where the old maple grows
    D................................
    Where eagles fly high

    G..............................
    I dream of such a place
    C.........................................D
    Where there's none but You and I
    G..........................
    A place for us to live
    D............................
    A place for us to die

    C...................................
    By the orchard in the cottage
    ?................................
    I'd lay me in your arms
    ?.............................
    While the winds whisper softly
    ?....................................
    Getting lost in your charms

    ? >> fill in the blanks ..
     
  14. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    wonderful poem GD...keep it up!!! Quite refreshing!!!
     
  15. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    bhai link post karoo .....this link is not working
     

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