the joke's on me

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by $cReWdR!veR, Sep 13, 2005.

  1. $cReWdR!veR

    $cReWdR!veR .:: Sweetheart ::.

    I keep waiting for the phone to ring
    Yet I know it won't be you;
    I try to fill my life with busyness
    Yet all I do is think of you.

    What became of us
    And all our dreams and plans;
    How could you turn and walk away
    As I watched our castles turn to sand?

    Do you never even miss me
    Don't you long to caress my face;
    How could you forget so easily
    And You I can't erase?

    I want to be in your arms again
    To see the laughter in your eyes;
    But I guess the joke's on me
    And Oh! Was I surprised!
     
    $cReWdR!veR, Sep 13, 2005
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    Subhro and vini like this.
  2. akkyy21

    akkyy21 #%@!$&

    Hehehe,.... nice one!!!!! very senti
     
    akkyy21, Sep 13, 2005
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  3. cYpHeR

    cYpHeR Banned

    nice one.....
     
    cYpHeR, Sep 13, 2005
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  4. ssslayer

    ssslayer Banned

    LOL ...

    nice one ...


    n since i am a sadist ... i found it humorous too ... ;)
     
    ssslayer, Sep 13, 2005
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  5. ronnieanand

    ronnieanand n00bier th@n th0u

    Shenteeeeeeee
     
    ronnieanand, Sep 13, 2005
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  6. vishwa_81us

    vishwa_81us Banned

    speechless..
     
    vishwa_81us, Sep 13, 2005
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  7. $cReWdR!veR

    $cReWdR!veR .:: Sweetheart ::.

    hehe.....y u speechless ya vishwa.....
     
    $cReWdR!veR, Sep 13, 2005
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  8. vishwa_81us

    vishwa_81us Banned

    to find that u can write so well.. just straight from heart..
     
    vishwa_81us, Sep 13, 2005
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  9. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    Nicely written, I really liked this. It made me go "aww" in the end.


    The second verse was especially cool but I'd prefer a "yet" instead of "and" in the third.



    Nothing to bitch about so I'll give you two thumbs up for this.
     
    bjr, Sep 13, 2005
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  10. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Gr88....something I can relate to....
     
    Garima, Sep 14, 2005
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  11. anshphenomenon

    anshphenomenon Rape me :boff:

    gr8 job screwdriver..!!
    u have done what a screwdriver does best... ;)
     
    anshphenomenon, Sep 14, 2005
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  12. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    so screwy is on a poetry writing spell..heehe,.. gud one yaar!

    my very first rep for u sweety :)
     
    vini, Sep 14, 2005
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  13. jal_babe

    jal_babe im a SEDUCER

    hmmmmmm very good indeed
     
    jal_babe, Sep 14, 2005
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  14. rocking_devil

    rocking_devil Banned

    ....................
     
    rocking_devil, Sep 15, 2005
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  15. ssslayer

    ssslayer Banned

    ^^^ no emails allowed ;)

    ROTFL ... MODs pls censor it ... snip-snip
     
    ssslayer, Sep 15, 2005
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  16. cYpHeR

    cYpHeR Banned

    cYpHeR, Sep 15, 2005
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  17. ssslayer

    ssslayer Banned

    ***Crime Branch is on Prowl today it seems ... ***
     
    ssslayer, Sep 15, 2005
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  18. anshphenomenon

    anshphenomenon Rape me :boff:

    screwdriver..
    ur in some trouble baby!!
     
    anshphenomenon, Sep 15, 2005
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  19. rocking_devil

    rocking_devil Banned

    do u really think thats a mail link......click and find out!....i myself dunno how it got linked! :p:

    @everyone.....im editing my posts praising screw....to blanks....if mods wish...the can delte them as well.! :aggre:
     
    rocking_devil, Sep 15, 2005
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