The impossible wish

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by angel_of_sin, May 12, 2009.

  1. angel_of_sin

    angel_of_sin bassist.....

    I sit in my study, i try to find
    The moments of carelessness, I had when i was a child
    Going to school and coming back,
    Playing with your friends and hitting the sack.

    Where in the transition did I lose the Childhood,
    The innocence in my eyes,
    the mischievous spirit of my mind

    All i can think of now is Love, Career and hope.
    Love from my friends and family
    Career for the better future
    and hope that my dreams come true

    If only we could forget everything for a minute.
    No worries, no mistakes
    and no cares for the feelings at stake

    This world would be free
    Free from the slavery the man has created for itself.
    Free from the shackles of the earthly thoughts.

    But my wish shouldn't be permanent
    As the human nature is,
    we would never realize the joys of childhood
    if we were children all the time.
    That my dear is the beauty of it.

    cheers
    ankit kaushik...
     
  2. spydra

    spydra New Member

    Nice thought, well expressed.
     
  3. angel_of_sin

    angel_of_sin bassist.....

    thanx buddy.........
     
  4. alpha1

    alpha1 I BLUES!

    Anyway, you have a choice to become your mischevious-child-self anytime.
    Its just that ppl are too concerned about others around them, and behave in a predictably boring fashion throughout their lives.

    IMO, child though gullible, has got a real indepedent thought and feeling, and the more we grow up, the more "follow the herd" things creeps up (perhaps subconciously)
     
  5. distorted

    distorted satan

    Who wrote it?
     
  6. angel_of_sin

    angel_of_sin bassist.....

    me??...............
     
  7. distorted

    distorted satan

    Ohk, so u r ankit kaushik n u wrote it... cool... Carry on the job brother...
    N wt happened to yr band? I guess u wr abt to start a band aftr yr xams...
     
  8. angel_of_sin

    angel_of_sin bassist.....

    didnt find tym to do dat man.....bin busy wid one thing or da oder since den..........luks lyk i will hve to wait for another 3 or 4 months.....
     
  9. good try ... keep trying
     
  10. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    nice thought but not well developed .. u could have used some serrogates and examples and put hide the thought a little ... that realization of loss of innocence is not what ur lines express, they are too blunt to evoke curiosity intrust
     
  11. angel_of_sin

    angel_of_sin bassist.....

    yea i knw.....i neva thought dis poem was worth typing and posting on da net......bt den i thought wat da hell......
     
  12. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    yup waht the hell...haha ...i like the sprit...u rock so ur words...keep rocking !!
     

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