Something I wrote long ago. The Death of a Machine Illusive emotions A drear life Noisome to the core A blunt knife Obliteration of All things human Pointless existence A machine made to run An eternal distance A slate too clean Devoid of even pain Numb, I've always been Then someone comes along Slowly brings me to life And that is how, finally The machine died.
Hey dont demean and disrespect your own work by callling it crap dude/dudette its a nice poem.. i like how something inanimate is related to life and furthermore, its death.. Hope to see more of your work since i presume you've jus started posting Welcome to the forum..
Thanks Bubbly I've edited the post, it no longer says "crap" Yes, it's my first day as a member here, although I have been browsing IGT for a while.
i'm quite aware of the browsing factor..therefor i specified posting do post some more of your poems...even if they've been written long ago.. it would be nice to read a different style of poetry and a different take on life and its freebies... All the best and hope you enjoy posting as much as browsing
so u were calling this as crap... if crap is so good... i wonder how 'good poem' from u will be...:shock: welcome here... plz continue sharing such a nice craps with us..
very nicely written indeed...but gets a little ambiguous for me in last few lines...will rattle my grey cells well! way to go
I wish your poem were longer, I feel there should've been more before the last stanza. Or a few stanzas about how that someone brought you to life. But, I love the idea behind the poem!
Now that I think about it, I feel so too. But I wrote it a long time ago. The other poem I posted was written today only. I doubt anybody has read it though. Anyway, thanks!
