The Dark Alley

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Petunia, Jan 27, 2006.

  1. Petunia

    Petunia terminally dorky

    Just putting it out there...


    The dark alley;
    The desperate beating of a heart.
    She's Alone;
    Petrified and yet composed
    Somewhere in the distance she hears music-
    Soft, slow music-bringing back the Memories-
    Just for a moment-then she is back;
    Inside her-things fall apart.
    Dreams shatter; Drowning in a Puddle of Sorrow;
    Reality sinks in-and she weeps-weeps like a baby.
    Like a hungry baby; for love, comfort, security--Answers.
    For a place called Home.
    Alone in the alley.
    The place begins to cave in, becoming smaller,
    Making it hard for her to breathe. She turns-only to find darkness.
    The Dead End.
    It was hard—she could have done so much.
    She longs to run-run-out of life.

    whadya think?
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  2. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    for a moment...i thought, u were describng me.. when i was in such a situation...!!!!!
    gr8 petunia....
    reps for u..!
  3. shak

    shak Harrr!

    sad ...
    makes me appreciate the life that i have ...

    nicely written raff ... a good change from all the love-hatred-sorrow inspired poems around here ...
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  4. Petunia

    Petunia terminally dorky

    ahem...thank you thank you...*bow*
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  5. idefixe

    idefixe New Member

    Nice poem petunia. Its kind of a nice free verse....difficult 2 write
    Its got a nice flow..................bythe way i am new to IGT
    THis is idefixe.......i havealso posted a couple of poems........take a look and do post those commemts....bye for now
    would like 2 hear frm u soon,,,,,take care
  6. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    Very difficult to pull something like this off and you've done well. You can write, girl.
  7. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    i know only a few who can write on such subjects...and write well...u r one of them..:nw:
  8. Amanush...

    Amanush... Tanha Rahi...!

    Emotions nicely expressed...! I love your style !

    Do keep sharing your awesome works

    Take care


  9. Petunia

    Petunia terminally dorky

    @idefixe: hey man, welcome to IGT...thnks and definitely will keep a lookie for ur poems. keep rocking.
    @bjr..awww, thanks bro. Always look fwd to ur cmments. Too bad i banned the pirate boogie..or we cudda done a little skit together. ;)
    @hardik: YOU DA MAAANNn!! :rock:
    @ amanush: thanks man. Im like a emotional-musical waterfountain... blow spontaneously :grin: wonder when the next time'll be when ive got the sense to rite about!
  10. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    I like the way you portrait it....very nice...!petunia
  11. Petunia

    Petunia terminally dorky

    *bows gracefully*

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