The Curse - I

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by horsesmouth, Mar 26, 2009.

  1. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    The Curse - I - Words of hate

    I know you'll hate it, I do too....


    Just when life gives you all it could,
    comes from nowhere these hated words.
    Words you worked all life to keep away,
    and pains for ages to come.

    The ancient lady in black,
    uttered these words of sheer disgrace.
    And i remembered all my life's mistakes,
    its too late to undo.

    The words rang through my head,
    digging into my soul.
    Etching with their fingernails,
    these words of hate and sorrow:
    "Thou shalt be a charmer, but not beloved.
    Thou shalt be kissed, but not lived with.
    Everything that thou shalt feel yours,
    Shalt be ridden of your bequests.
    Thou shalt live alone, and leave alone."

    Even as they pained me no end,
    I knew too well they were true.
    And in some corner of my injured soul,
    I knew I deserved them too.



    (to be continued............)
     
  2. soumya256

    soumya256 New Member

    naa its gud.....
    nt at all worth hating
     
  3. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    hehe////

    thanks...well its "to be continued" thing........look out for its ending!
     
  4. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    Its not hating, infact I loved it so much that I hate it now...
    its not the first time I've spoken my heart out here, nor will it be the last,
    and I wrote something so dark, it shocked me....and I'm touched,
    which is why I hated it in the first place....

    I myself lie somwhere between the first part(ending) and second part(beginning)
    which means my life is kinda messed-up ryt now.....
     
  5. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    no-more replies....
     
  6. allstarsband

    allstarsband New Member

    you're totally awesome!!!!
    hats off to you man
    i also read "the reprise" and felt its beauty......you're really an artist!
    reps!!!though I know they would'nt count......
     
  7. metalhead_junky

    metalhead_junky New Member

    yup, you're the man,
    m going to read the second one now.....really curious
    you're a poet in the real sense, an artist one craves to be all the time!
    keep it up!
     
  8. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    Thanks for all the love you ppl hav shown me! m not that gr8 a poet, i dunno wat was inside me when I did these 2 poems, and now m llike, OMG i did it!
    \thanks/

    :senti:
     
  9. can the second part be written with a very sad ending ??
     
  10. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    you mean those tragic art movie stuff..
    no one will even see the damn thing (except you!)
    :D
    actually m thinking of a third part to this thing...wats say?
     
  11. why not ...and yes i ws taking exactly about the art movie type dark damp ending in disgust
     
  12. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    jeez.....bdw i completed the third poem, but considering the second part, it was inappropriate to give a sad ending....so m sorry....i'll do it for you next time!
     

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