The Bird!

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by #iR@, Feb 12, 2006.

  1. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

     The bird

    Just like the bird
    I want to fly
    High, above the skyline
    Where no one can reach me
    Forever and ever
    I will live there alone
    In the clouds colder than your soul
    U could just dream of me
    Once I am away
    No chains could grip me
    That is all I can say
    I want to fly like a free bird
    And rule the skies
    Follow my dreams
    And my desires
    I will be free forever
    Away from u
    And I think that will teach u the lesson
    Of being untrue!

    comments plzz... always looking forward to them! :cool:
     
  2. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    good expression of your desire to be free...

    good work...
     
  3. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    *sigh* if only we had wings

    lovely thoughts girl...
     
  4. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    ^Wonderful poem, but try to put this statement in perspective, the one single sole reason (apart from the fact that i cant write) that i dont write poetry is because it makes you transparent, a person can learn much by reading between the lines of your poetry.
     
  5. Subhro

    Subhro Argentina lost :"(

    hey i love this poem very much. i'l add this 1 2 my collection. :)
     
  6. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    sundar aahe tuzi kavitaa...
    malaa faar aavdli....
     
  7. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    "Where no one can reach me " aisa kaise hoo sakat hai Gori...hummm kanfujiyaa gaye..........good lines
     
  8. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    @ amit82cse... thanks a lot mate! :)

    @ bubbly... thanks gurl! its always great to read ur comments!:)

    @ disturbed... thanks a lot for ur thoughts man! :) i have a feeling u should TRY riting once... i think u can rite pretty well...

    @ subhro... MEANS A LOT MAN! :nw:

    @ nimisha... thanks! :)

    @ madhuresh... :shock: *AHEM* *AHEM*... thanks man! ;)
     
  9. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Maybe i will, and maybe you'll be the first one to read it.......speculative future...
     
  10. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    ^wow... i am flattered man! chalo GOOD LUCK! :)
     
  11. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    I see you as a fledgling.. waiting to take flight!

    Cute poem... reminds me of my earlier ones actually :)
     
  12. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    @ cryptic... thanks! :)
     
  13. sweetie

    sweetie New Member

    Amazing..too good...:rock: few words i would like to say :
    Flying up above
    Filled with love forever
    Within the sky a lantern
    The glow that's always there
    I'll stay with you forever
    We'll travel through the sky as now
    My wings are yours to fly...
     
  14. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    @ sweetie... thanks! :) i must say u rite quiet well too!
     
  15. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    Hmm..good one :think:
     
  16. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    @ vini... thanks! :cool:
     

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