thank you

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by browneyegurlie, Mar 8, 2005.

  1. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    the sun rises,
    spreading radiance,
    raising a smile
    upon my face.
    A thousand doves
    cant repay my debt.
    a sense of guilt emerges,
    for my wrong doings.
    and i hang my head
    in shame.
    the strings of sweet melody
    ring in my ears,
    sailing me off to unheard bliss
    where the ice is broken
    and misunderstandings unknown.
    The flashes of stars,
    racing across the sky,
    capture my wish with one wave.
    The fire has burnt dry.
    the teenage anger realised,
    thanks to you.
    an end to a chapter,
    unwritten and blank.
    full stop.
     
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  2. tejas

    tejas ..........

    I absolutely love the imagery in your poems. I think I need to take a class from you about imagery. Great stuff. Keep it up!
     
  3. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Whatever my friend said:p: Just kidding, great stuff preetha:)
     
  4. maverick8218

    maverick8218 New Member

    "the ice is broken" .... how in hell's name didya think of that ? man, i like it... tejas is absolutely right, the imagery you use rocks...
     
  5. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    hahaha thank u..it not that gud *blushes*
    this is like a part 2 of a poem i've dun b4 which i shall post later....i was very down etc and my friend helped me and this poem is dedicated to him
     
  6. rockin'away

    rockin'away Banned

    hey sis great one read it first:).... saw u write it:)... keep it up...:).. o ye and reps for u!!!
     

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