Th' Lion and th' Sage (The Fighting soul)

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by horsesmouth, Feb 12, 2009.

  1. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    before I start this, lemme tell you, I have'nt copied it from newhere as ppl end up critcising it. its 100% original...only the 1st phrase was inspired frm somewhere(i dont remember, its very old)

    its one of my favourites I've eva penned. I love it cuz its very encouraging.


    From the cradle to the grave,
    Be the winter very rave,
    Ratty a soul not I have,
    Which in no time shall bereave.
    It's not the end, 'thas just begun,
    That game you lost, and you have to rewin.

    Dekk' through the souls of the past,
    That often through their shadows cast,
    The ray, a slit, pours in the life
    of agony; Lone pleasures are only a rife.

    Heart's a lion in a cage,
    Bearing a mark of hermitage.
    Can catch its prey, though old in age;
    Though old in age, the old can rise,
    The sage in the Lion can be the wise.

    Its that the wise, the soul that dares,
    To know what we do, with a little care;
    Then ends the old age;
    And man sums the Lion and the Sage.


    temme how'd u like it??
     
  2. although i like the plot and the symbolism...but u sound confused...may be u dont really knw them well !!
    anyways good attempt
     
  3. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    hmmm....
    actually I mean to say is:
    I'll neva lose, even if I do, I shall come rocking bacK....I shall fight everytime....n neva grieve over my failures...

    I'll learn from ma past mistakes, and will gain strength from my happy moments; no life is complete without loss and grief...

    A man is both a LION and a SAGE at different times....one being the Bravest, Fiercest, and Strongest; and other being the Wisest....I'm both and I'll be Wise, Brave and Strong at the same ttime....

    The wise soul is the one who dares, and does things only if they are right, and doesnt think whether its difficult or not; he tries...which makes him both wise and strong...and a sum of Lion and the Sage

    ......wel thats it....
     
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  4. hmm ...i ws wrong... good poetry ...reps added
     
  5. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    thnXXX-a-lottt
     
  6. sudiptwhizkid

    sudiptwhizkid New Member

    I am not shocked .. I was kinda sure u can be a nice poet .. and there u go .. nice one ..
     
  7. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    man, I feel so-much-better now!
    thanks again!
     
  8. sudiptwhizkid

    sudiptwhizkid New Member

    Were u Craving for my comments .. lmao!!! ..
    On a serious note .. U are good!!! .. wud like to keep a check on ur poems .. DUn worry i wont copy them ... but wanna learn how to form one .. cos when i compose a song .. i end up with words .. and then just randomly fill them up .. which screws up the harmony eventually ..
     
  9. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    ^
    I seldom get praised *emo*

    you've to feel the rhythm to get it really
    ...
    ......
    .......

    .........^
    .........I dint understand that, did u?

    :p
     
  10. sudiptwhizkid

    sudiptwhizkid New Member

    Makes sense .. At least u are talking 'words n rythm' .. unlike others ... who seem to be ironically hip-hop fans ..
     
  11. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    I tried makin hip-hop-cool-type ones......failed miserably, so ended up doing these!
    I like both types really, but cant make good 1s
     
  12. sudiptwhizkid

    sudiptwhizkid New Member

    Seems like u had too many desires but couldnt fulfil them .. for the sake of sacrifices..

    I m no one to presume .. but thats wat i get to understand .. when i read ur poem ..
    Its actually good!!! .. N e ways .. keep it rollin' time to leave ..
     
  13. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    wel its all history(6 years baK)....
    cya
     
  14. augur

    augur I love bjr

  15. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

  16. detritus

    detritus New Member

  17. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    Why-oh-why?
    dint like the poem?
     
  18. augur

    augur I love bjr

  19. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    I wont reply
    I dont wanna reply
    this doesnt deserve it///
     
  20. sudiptwhizkid

    sudiptwhizkid New Member

    6 years bak ??? :O .. Does ur story start with 'Once Upon a time .... '
     

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