tere jaane se

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nandy0894, Mar 14, 2012.

  1. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    hey
    i was just trying to clean up my room..
    ah i love doing it..though the frequency is much less..haha...
    found many of my poems which i wrote quite a few years back .. i was reading this one and thought./..damn i wrote that as a kid?? haha
    read and post your comments.. :)


    tere jaane se to kuch badla nahi
    raat bhi aai thi aur chaand bhi tha
    haan magar neend nahi..

    aankh jhapakti to hai hamesha ki tarah
    thodi bheegi c rehti hai hmesha ki tarah
    han magar unn aansuon ko behne dena nahi ..

    honth khushk hote hain
    aur pyas bhi aaj boht hai
    par labo ko unki aakansha se milana nahi..

    dunia ghoomti hai apne he treeke se
    zindgi bhi chlti he rehti hai apne saleeke se
    par uss raftar se ab humein chalna nahi ..

    fir har subah ki trah sooraj nikla to hai
    roshan hrr kone ko krr gya hai..
    par aaj neend ka..aaj sapno ka daaman chodne ko mann nahi..

    tere jaane se kuch badla to nahi..
    raat bhi vohi
    chaand bhi vohi
    din bhi vahi
    sooraj bhi vohi..
    aankhein bhi vohi..
    lub bhi vohi..
    tere jaane se kuch bhi badla to nahi..
     
  2. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    you used to write better a few years back... :p
    *writing in hindi is dufficult*
     
  3. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member


    haha i am in a dilemma...compliment or comment? ah..nyways..thank you..
    not reAlly difficult..i dunno..but i haven't written in hindi since a long long time..
     
  4. Awesome ... Bhuut bhahuut accha likha hai
    sabse acchi lines mujhe ye vaali lagi

    dunia ghoomti hai apne he treeke se
    zindgi bhi chlti he rehti hai apne saleeke se
    par uss raftar se ab humein chalna nahi ..

    kyaa baat hai... !!

    Suggestion: if possible isse apni aavaaz main record kar dijiye and then post .. i feel not many will read it in its correct flow and wont realize the taste this kind of poetry produces..

    reps points stars all added ... . the purity and flavour hindi has no other linguistic expression can achive ..keep posting ur creations in hindi.
     
  5. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member


    :) thanks a lot!!
    and umm...i don't really recite..i mean..that good..
    why don't you post it? i mean just the way that you read it? maybe it would be the same way i had written it :)

    and thank you again..and i will keep on posting in hindi..now that i've found out many of them..haha :)
     

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