Tears of Pain Tears of pain flowing in the rain All my screams in vain Who was I to question Who was I to blame… They ripped my heart away My soul was gasping for the last look Who was I to question Who was I to blame Tonight I mourn my past I bury the ray of hope What is love? I question falling on my knees I have broken into flames Burning my memories together Who was I to question Who was I to blame
first two stanza makes a great start.. n seems this poetry gonna rock.. but effect lessens in last two stanza.. ending is not that effective too.. may be u should add something in it.. but no doubt.. good work..
thanks guys i shall take nimishas comments as part of my learning curve, ill relook into the poem and see if i can add something altho i wrote it some time back and seriously would not like to revisit that mood , since it is attached to a personal tragedy...
make it into a song.. reminds me of tears in heaven..was that the inspiration..? and yh..add something more..kinda seems incomplete..
tears in heaven was not the inspiration , they were really tears of pain that compelled me to put my feelings on paper.... Thanks...
