Takdeer..

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nimisha, Jan 7, 2006.

  1. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    posting this poem which is so close to my heart....
    i dont care if its good in terms of poetic skills or not... But yes, its surely sincere for the emotions in it... as it comes from my heart....!

    waiting for ur comments...


    Takdeer.....


    kismat ki lakeeron se pareshaan the yuhi..
    na jaane yeh kaise takdeer badal gayi..
    . Naam kya likkha hatheli pe teraa..
    . haathon ki har ek lakeer badal gayi..

    Aks aayeene me kuch gum huaa karte the
    na jaane kyu unki takdeer badal gayi
    . dekhaa jo ek baar jhaank ke tune..
    . aayeene ki har ek tasweer badal gayi..

    Silwaton-karwaton me kuch khwab the uljhe
    naa jaane kyu unki takdeer badal gayi
    . zindagi huyi khwabon se bhi haseen..
    . tum jo aaye, khwabon ki tabeer badal gayi..
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    hope u guys like this...
    and after reading this..
    plz dont forget to wish me for my last university exams (practicals) starting from 11th january..
    need best wishes from all of u..
     
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  2. .:SpY_GaMe:.

    .:SpY_GaMe:. New Member

    wah wah wah wah


    at first i though that the poetry forum was a bore

    but u vishwaa astroguru n the rest have really transformed it into a really nice n interesting forum ;)
     
  3. astroguru26

    astroguru26 New Member

    waqt ke sitam un lakeeron mein hote hai,
    jo khuli palak se sapne pirote hai.
    khusiyon ka daaman kuch pal hi sahi.
    dard ke anjaam bhi kuch de jaate hai.

    jeene ki aadat unhein nahi hoti
    lakeeron ko dekh kar jo jeete hai.
    aks to pal mein badal jayenge.
    umra bhar jo beeta kal sochkar rote hai.


    i tried on differnt setup........but arguably no class of nimisha posting...


    rohit
    astroguru26
     
  4. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    its really nice nimisha...but i din get the last line coz i dunno whats "tabeer"....can you be kind enough to explain...:eek::

    btw...All the best for ur pracs...:beer:
     
  5. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    spy, astro and hardik.... thanks you very much...

    btw according to my knowledge khwabon ki tabeer means.. expression of dreams(as i dont know urdu much..if somebody knows, they can correct me)

    i expected much more response on this poem as it is so close to my heart..
    (i feel i write better in hindi than english...but i get more response to my english poems.. i wonder why!!!)
     
  6. sanju_strings

    sanju_strings 50 Pai$e <3V/S<3 50 CeNt$

    hey nice 1 doctor nice poem .......well do gud in ya exams ..............all da best ;)
     
  7. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    i think this is the best one till now! :) very nice :beer:
     
  8. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    @sanju...hey thanks for ur wishes..

    @hira.. i wonder if others wud have felt same.. but anyways..thanks..
     
  9. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    beautiful....as ur all poems are :)
    & yeah....all the best from me too..:):)
     
  10. faraz khan

    faraz khan Fkay'zzz .......GoNe MaD!

    hey nimisha... extremely gud job!! i reallly appreciate ur effort..

    . Naam kya likkha hatheli pe teraa..
    . haathon ki har ek lakeer badal gayi..
    WAH!! WAH!!

    maza agaya!



    best of luck for uni exams :)
     
  11. Punnu

    Punnu New Member

    Nice poem Nimisha.......trust me i think U r Good
    .....also All the best for ur Exams....u'll do good.....Cheerio
     
  12. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&amp;*$@*^$


    ^First .................... dats another good work 4m you Nimisha........

    ^second ...a dumb Qs.... what does "Aks" means actually ... m nt dat good in Hindi... so pls ..dont mind telling me dis.........
     
  13. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    @garima,apurb, faraz, punnu...
    thanks for efforts of readin this..
    and double thanks for your wishes for exams...i really needed that..! :eek::

    btw.. aks is reflection in the mirror..
     
  14. faraz khan

    faraz khan Fkay'zzz .......GoNe MaD!

    I read it once again and enjoyed that ......
    I certainly enjoyed that ...... Icant give U marks but certainly I can give U reps
     
  15. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Nice

    Very good composition.

    Very thoughtful
     
  16. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    @walkalone...thanks.. :nw:

    @faraz..thats so nice of you.. comin from the hectic day of exam..n then seeing this reps..gr8..!!..thanks..
     
  17. faraz khan

    faraz khan Fkay'zzz .......GoNe MaD!

    whenever anyone deserves.........gets it !!
    Welcome
     
  18. shahjee404

    shahjee404 New Member

    khwabon Ki Tabeer In Hindi

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  19. anum324

    anum324 New Member

    Hey Nimisha, i am here after long and read this one.It's amazing and truly so simple and beautiful, if I can say.I like to write in hindi all the time as you mentioned.

    Nice and romantic....i felt like this while reading.
     

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