Sweet Poison

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by i'm_not_neo, Dec 3, 2006.

  1. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    Yet another poem...but this one is the last one coz I have my exams soon...
    This poetry forum is like completely addictive....
    Seriously I don't know what the title should be..I got it wrong for this poem but I felt it somehow fits the poem to some extent...

    Yeah thats the word
    just made for you
    Coz as crazy as it may seem
    everytime I'm with you you
    you drown out all the pain.
    everytime I see you,
    I fall in love with you
    all over again.

    I'm really tired now
    Each day seems like the first date
    Time seems to stop
    My face gets flushed in red
    And just like a mushy song's refrain,
    I feel like I'm falling in love with you,
    all over again.

    So I'm deciding to finally
    ask her,to marry me
    to free this heart
    from this sweet poison,
    and share a love deeper than
    the deepest ocean,
    And end my so called "first-love bane"
    And yet I'm so goddamn sure,
    Every morning that I'll see you
    I'll fall in love with you
    all over again.
  2. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    initially i thought this was any odinary work ...but it some how created a cozy feeling ..sweet poem ...

    "So I'm deciding to finally
    ask her,to marry me "
    aur iss ke baare main ...yar abhi tu keh hi de
  3. #iR@


    nice work man.... and i think the title is very well chosen! :)
  4. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    Lovely poem.. :)
  5. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Very Very cute poem.
  6. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    @madhuresh ...your comments/opinions are welcome...and thanx for taking the pains of reading this poem eventhough u thought it was "any ordinary work"...do continue to read all of my "ordinary works" coz you're one of those who always give an honest opinion...

    @hira...thank you for letting me know the title was good and liking the poem..

    Cryptic_angel and walk_alone...thanks for those compliments..means a lot for newbies like me.

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