Hi folks! This is my first post here and I hope I fit right in with all you awesome people. Im sorry i havent read anything else yet and I swear I shall comment on other peoples threads as I go along. Im just a brand new virgin for now lol. ah this poem (or is it song?) was written in self defence to a line that Ive heard way too much recently "If Id known the last time I kissed you was the last time I'll ever kiss you......." so that got me thinking what if one of them knew their kiss was the last and then I started writing. This poem isnt exactly about that though. anyway read on and comment. any criticism that is fair is welcome. This is also the last time I try to rhyme my lines its so hard!!!! Swansong An uncomfortable moment shared As eyes meet and turn away Betraying a truth, twice untold In words that lips couldn't say. Awkward but inevitable I hold you close and realize One last dance is all I get Thinking back I close my eyes Moving in time to lips and love Moving in rhythm, getting it wrong I dance my dance to these memories You dance your dance to the song Eyes follow us like a spotlight Knowing yet not feeling Unaware, you mock my plight With dancing eyes, spirit freewheeling Moving in time to beat and strum Moving in rhythm, getting it right I dance my dance to the moment You dance your dance to the night. And as I lead you out of my life I live an eternity in every breath Tonight I dance with my life Tomorrow I shall dance with death. Please tell her I'm sorry. __________ Its very raw, I just wrote it yesterday so Im not even sure if its a song. I hope it is. I'd love to get feedback.