Survival of fittest

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by walk_alone, Jun 27, 2010.

  1. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    in fight of myriad
    survives the fittest

    outpowers rest
    wins the best

    grows with care
    in a sacred lair

    nurtures and nourishes ...

    Pain and hope
    with clutched fingers

    screams, prays
    and the body shivers


    Gods have smiled ...


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    very simple without any pomp and glow.

    criticism in any form is welcome
     
  2. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    its....simple....nd sweet... :) ..nd btw...wher hav u dissapeared these days..u dun' comment as such on ny of d poems of the forum...is all ok??
     
  3. sukriti_hats

    sukriti_hats Member

    till the poem is delivering the msg clearly...it's good
    and this one is short yet delivering the msg...so it's good too
    i had to read the second part thrice to understand it...u can hold my state of mind responsible for that :)
     
  4. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Thxs Nandy and Sukriti, I have been busy for a while, will definitely read and post my comments soon.

    I wrote this poem in flat 5 minutes while reading about "theory of evolution" by Charles Darwin.

    I hope all undestand the analogy.
     
  5. I liked the way you have recited ... small steps...cheers for that !


    not much was said in the poem.. i wounder waht can one say bout this .. in essance is a extension of the thoguth process whcih describes gods fetish to watch the people on earth in misery and enjoy...

    Darwin is one of my fav oldie ..and wahtever he siad had no emotions ( science is an explanation of observed) ... gods and destiny all dont fit there..

    But all in all i like it ..just beacuse its a new way of looking at the thingie :p
     
  6. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Thxs Monica ... cheers!!!
     
  7. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    Good one!
    curtly expressed without emotions
    liked it...
     
  8. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    thxs again ...
     

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