hi.. your comments now sunrise looks like pale in colour the lovely rainbows were like sword hanging in sky the compassion in eyes seems dead.. the smile looks sarcastic the softness goes into oblivion.. just a second while you told me... i am not in love with me now... its just i have given the name of love to our friendship the intensity of words sucked me... the world seemed as unworthy place to live.. perfect time to die.....said to myself u never looked back... with nice stride you walked out thanking me for all i have shared .. giving blessing for being always nice man..one more time listened what you said.. as mute..... unable to cry this time to say ...please never leave me.... the soul was motionless but the tide were hitting the shores of my life..overthrowing what i have love and enthusiasm for life was stinking foul... sitting alone on beach seeing my life sunset... rohit astroguru26
good work ...but i would also say u worked less on this one...Ek bade shyaar ne kaha hai "ho ke maauss na unn shaam se dhalte rahiye zindagi bhore hai suraj se nikalte rahiye"
@hardik....thanks for compliment....still a long way to learn how to play with words......... @ knights_diwani,#iR@...thanks @madhuresh....great advice from you who himself write well.. thanks to all for going through the poetry rohit astroguru26
I loved the thoughts behind it ... but not the words that you used to express them. Grammatical errors distracted me at many places... Dont be in a hurry to write a poem.
