sunday visit

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Sharmontime, Feb 8, 2006.

  1. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    this i wrote for my school mag whn i was in 8th...

    SUNDAY VISIT

    It was when mom told me about my head weight
    That I decided to get it set right
    So here I am waiting for my turn to come
    To surrender myself to the expert-to-become
    I never felt waiting to be so agonising
    Especially when he call the after-comers knowing
    And at last when he made me to sit
    I cursed myself for falling into mom's bait
    I wondered if my head will be intact
    The sound of the scissors made me react
    After all that when I am back home
    Here my little sister makes some fun some
    I vow that i never will go to him
    Alas! Back to the first line I'm.



    Love to hear from you all...though this is little kiddish...i hope you'll like it..

    Sharmontime :cool: [TM]
     
  2. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    :)kiddish but still sweet...

    its good to read a variety of poems..
     
  3. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    :grin: thank you bubbly..:goof:
     
  4. alpha1

    alpha1 I BLUES!

    haha.. how old r u now?

    P.S. m too lazy to check ur profile
     
  5. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    LOL... cute poem :)

    Makes me wanna dig out my old poems as well!

    Am off to check ur other poems now...
     
  6. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    At 13 I was so harcorely cool...I wrote about cupid and how he ruins my world etc. etc.


    Nice...same crit as last time. Amazing gift used mediocrely.
     
  7. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    @ alpha1...i shall turn @) this april:p:

    @cryptic angel : thanks dear.
    do show us ur poems that you have not...waiting.
    and pls do read my other poems also. i hope you like them too.

    @bjr...thanks for your appreciation friend.
    post here those cupid struck poems...mus b interesting.
    i understand and will work accordingly.


    Sharmontime:cool:
     

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