Suljan - uljan

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by kuns200, Mar 25, 2009.

  1. kuns200

    kuns200 New Member

    Ek pareshani hai jisse hum suljana chahte hai.
    Ek deewani hai jisse hum kehna chahte hai.
    Ek bhigi si tasveer hai, jiske rang pagla sein gaye hai.
    Ek nadi hai , jisme hum behna chahte hai.

    Dil, Dimag thode alag alag hai
    is wajah sein thode hum bhi ulje hai.
    suljan , uljan ko phir ulja rahi hai.
    Aadhi, ankahi batein muje fasa rahi hai.

    Ek pareshani hai jisse hum suljana chahte hai.
    Ek deewani hai jisse hum kehna chahte hai.

    Darr lag raha hai tumse woh baat kehne sein.
    Ki "Hum toh sirf dost hai" iss purane bahane sein
    Mein ab bhi daar raha tumse yeh baat kehne sein
    Is liye SMS kar raha hu iss shabdo kein sahare sein

    Ek pareshani hai jisse hum suljana chahte hai.
    Ek deewani hai jisse hum kehna chahte hai.
     
  2. suljha do keh do....
    accha likha hai
     
  3. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    its nice.....gennex Luv SMSs.....
    though too long for an SMS!
    :p
     
  4. anum324

    anum324 New Member

    Hey Very Nice thought, emotions put together.If you do not mind i have some suggestions here for vocab.I know writing hindi in english alphabets is not easy but works like "suljan"-can be written like "suljhan", same for uljan-uljhan,sein-se.

    2nd stanza cab be better put together for the fear and excitement of proposal to that special person.

    Mujhse hindi movie song yaad aa gaya: "Chupaana bhi nahi aata, jatana bhi nahi aata/humein tumse muhabbat hai, batana bhi nahi aata."

    Take care
     

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