Strangers... (song)

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nandy0894, May 15, 2010.

  1. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    my mind becomes so numb
    you move across my heart
    you walk across my soul
    and now i a walking down the same lane
    just say what u've got to say...
    you are over there as i pass by
    just so easily you pretend not to see
    and tell yourheart the greatest lie...
    so is the change of fate
    our story isn't of that late...
    now we pass by like strangers
    pretend not to know each other
    we're just like a bird dropped its feather...
    i beg you to stop
    but this malencholy is a flop...
    so we move apart fighting thoughts...fighting life..
    coz' now we are just strangers...
     
  2. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    for strangers, they do seem very close.. good lines! try paragraphing it..
     
  3. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    I honestly think, paragraphing is not necessary. Its abstract style and is good till it conveys the message clearly.

    @ nandy, its a good piece, straight from heart and it must mean something to you.
     
  4. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    thnx a ton...nd ya u r right in sm way...
     
  5. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    thnk u soo much ...ya it does mean very much to me...
     
  6. allstarsband

    allstarsband New Member

    nice poem....
    yes its abstract , but paragraphs luk neater....
     
  7. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    firstl its not a poem its a song nd a i'd keep ur suggestion in mind...thnx :)
     
  8. metalhead_junky

    metalhead_junky New Member

    its sweeet....good
     
  9. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    thnx a ton... :)
     
  10. this is preety decent ... this is like the true thing happning living sort withouth an attempt to mold hide or rephrase as some say... i like it ....keep posting kiddo u have it
     
  11. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    thnk u soo much.... :)
     

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