Story of a Leaf..

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Seher, Jul 13, 2006.

  1. Seher

    Seher New Member

    There was once a little leaf..
    Born in the spring time.. high up in a tree..
    At first it was a tiny white bud on a branch..
    But as the spring sun shone it uncurled itself to the palest green..
    As the summer sun shone hotter and hotter..
    The pale green leaf grew darker and darker..
    It spread itself on the branch of the tree..
    Changing its colour to the darkest green..
    But as the autumn came..
    The leaf started to loose its branch covering fame..
    It started to grow old, wrinkled, brown and thin..
    And left the tree with the first winter wind..
    Floated away till it reached the ground..
    Soon again the spring time came..
    And the story of the leaf started all over again..

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    An attempt to write something different..!!
     
  2. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    cute little poem..................i can imagine singing it to my kids during bedtime. :)
     
  3. Seher

    Seher New Member

    Thank you.. does it really seem to be like a Lullaby.. :)
     
  4. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    nice poem n nice concept too..
    but u can make it more beautiful by writting it more poetically..

    for eg... u write plain sentences like this:
    As the summer sun shone hotter and hotter..
    The pale green leaf grew darker and darker

    instead u can write:
    hotter n hotter , as the summer sun shone..
    darker n darker the pale green leaf grew
    spreading itself on the branch of tree..

    just a minor suggestion!
    cared to say this coz.. after all u claim to in..
    An attempt to write something different..!!
     
  5. Seher

    Seher New Member

    Thank You so much Nimisha for the suggestion.. Would try to be more rythmic in my next writing..!! :)
     
  6. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    this ws cute....choti patti........
     

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