still waiting....

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by astroguru26, Dec 10, 2005.

  1. astroguru26

    astroguru26 New Member


    posting my poetry titled as" still waiting.."

    i walked along the path,
    smiling for those who watched me,
    acknowledging the pain as gift
    thinking as destiny ..
    with numbness and silence beyond belief
    why me? asking my heart
    everytime why i am the scapegoat?
    walked on with my thoughts..

    i cried when the reality sinks in me..
    my world crumbled
    my dream becomes frozen ..
    tears poured out through me..
    like the cloudbursts....
    deep down i was at my lowest ebb.
    the sincerity with i made the edifice
    broken into pieces..
    survival was priority..i survived
    still walking on the path..
    saying to myself
    that was not the only worst i faced..
    there are many more in pipelines waiting..
    and ..
    if destiny is willing i will...again
    pass the test of my determination

    just walking alone..
    leaving the past dreams..untouched by future

    walked thru hardest days......and still waiting...still

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  2. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    thats gr8 rohit....
    element of experience in it

    im not so good at english.. but tried few lines, seeing urs...

    nobody is destined to walk alone..
    for the distances one have never known..

    there is someone to hold your hand..
    when u stumble upon, to make you stand..

    to see the world when you close your eyes..
    to wipe your tears, to hear your cries

    to walk through miles, to make you smile..
    to take a step ahead, when u stop for while..

    for ur every pain, someone will care..
    so dont walk alone, someone is there..

    let ur heart go wild,let ur doubts get clear..
    just take a look here, someone is near..
  3. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    gr8 work astro :)

    (but yeah, like vini said in ur other thread "who am i?", do check for grammatical errors)

    reps 2 ya!


    nice work gal, ur english seems fine to me :)
  4. astroguru26

    astroguru26 New Member

    thanks to nimishaa and cryptu...who are more expressive in imagination
    for giving comments...

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  5. sweetie

    sweetie New Member

    One more gem out of you Rohit:rock: very nice..

    @Nimisha you too have written very well and your english is good too..
    you have the talent girl:rock:
  6. #iR@


    great work man! :) reps for u!
  7. Babydoll

    Babydoll New Member

    Hats off to u rohit n Nimss

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