Speak up……… When you find me going away! Speak up……… When you want me to stay! When the night is dark, And you fear to part And the breathes turn into sighs Speak up……… With the whispers of your eyes. Enough………… Free the love we kept controlled. Enough………… Let the tears from eyes be rolled, When I‘ll hear your cries, I’ll sooth your sighs And if you want me to hold, Speak up……… With the whispers of your eyes! Say it……… When you need me to hold you tight. Say it……… When you need me the day not bright, When you deadly want me, When you truly need me And you wanna forget true lies, Speak up……… With the whispers of your eyes!!!!!!!! With the whispers of your eyes!!!!!!!!
u culd have extended the idea ...actually expressed it with some more depth....but this simple expression was also nice !
Nice write..simple yet not exactly typical..the 'deadly' struck me though..I got what you meant but that was too intense.Anyway,other than that it's like-able.
k to cn u sugest ny word istead of deadly? wel i wanted 2 make it simple in begining n deep at end ur head must b held high and u must know y!!!! let things depend on u, else ordinary 1's r 1000s in a queue!!!!!!!!!
Nope..you don't need to change it.I was merely expressing my point of view.Though something like 'absolutely' could suffice,I liked the intensity of 'deadly'..unconventional maybe,but good.
heyy dats a pretty good poem... liked it though i had some minor issues wid "deadly" but i see its already been discussed soo wont talk about it... other than dat i liked it =) keep posting
wel lemme corect u.its a song nt a poem! bt thnx 4 ur complimnts.hey bt c m cnfusd tht wat is wrng abt deadly? i mean i like it. dsnt it makin ny sense in d song?
