Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by rockin'away, Mar 31, 2005.

  1. rockin'away

    rockin'away Banned

    hooked to every needle
    pierced in every side
    the blood streams
    yet no pain

    clamped to sharp spikes
    family died before me
    the loss is large
    yet no tears

    death awaits around the corner
    can hit me any moment
    this doesnt effect me now
    i have no soul
  2. tejas

    tejas ..........

    Hmm....Honestly, I don't like it much. Sorry, but its kinda vague. Take some time out to explain a few questions like Why? and How?. Its a start, definitely, so work on it. It needs a lot more.

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