Song by me..Kinda soppy but read and reply

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by musiconthemind, Oct 6, 2007.

  1. musiconthemind

    musiconthemind New Member

    This song was written by me..pls read it and post comments...

    You dont even answer my calls
    You dont even look at me when im around.
    Why is our love..breaking up?
    It was so perfect...
    Now its dust..
    And our love,,,is dying everyday..
    And this love was never meant to stay..

    aaahhh(some music here)

    And our love was flourishing each day..
    And this love,,was never meant to die this way..
    Why is this happening to us??
    Our love was so perfect..
    Now its..dust..
    And our love,,has gone to its grave..
    And this love was never meant to stay

    aaahhh(music here)

    And its useless to ever hope you'll come back
    And its hurtful to know this will be the last..
    The last time u hug me..
    The last time we kisss.
    The last time u hold me..
    The last time we're this

    And our love is history today
    And this love was never meant to stay...

    aaaahhh(music and fades)

    post your comments..
  2. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    umm..not that bad

    can improve
  3. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    wud like to hear a song u composed with these lyrics..
    nice effort though.
  4. musiconthemind

    musiconthemind New Member

    hey thanx..will try to record the song and post it..
  5. fairandlovely

    fairandlovely peeka-boo

    its okay. maybe one of those songs that dont stand out lyrically but blow you away with the music?

    What I don't like is how the whole song keeps repeating that you and your love are finito and says nothing beyond that. Maybe you should try to think beyond how s/he isnt with you anymore and build from there.

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