Social Outcast

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by king.xeo, Aug 13, 2012.

  1. king.xeo

    king.xeo New Member

    Wrote this thing after watching "Fight Club" and listening to some Kreator's songs.

    "
    Society has outcast me
    I failed to live in this society
    They'll regret the day they were born
    because they filled me with hate and scorn.

    Suffocation of Justice
    has been done
    Choking the Law
    just for fun
    Lives been taken in this game
    I've blotted the whole society's name

    Fighting.I AM.A very own personal war
    Destruction of All. what else could it be for ??

    Fall.Fall.FALL DOWN, real quick fast
    Challenge me and you will the last
    Society will regret the whole ****ing past
    The Day.When they made me the - SOCIAL OUTCAST.
    "
     
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  2. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    Its good. I guess you're new to poetry in general, because you have forced the rhymes..
     
  3. Poison...

    Poison... New Member

    Don't try to rhyme ALL the sentences, but try conveying your meaning first.
    It matters more what you convey than how well you rhyme.
     

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