Socha tha....

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Garima, Nov 7, 2006.

  1. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo I couldn't think of an appropriate Title so I have just now Titled this one as "Socha Tha"....may be cos thats one of the most frequently used word :p:

    now before you proceed.....

    WARNING: The first person who heard this has already claimed it as read at your own risk. He asked me to make some changes but I dint...cos I love it(though it has been said "bekaar") the way it is.

    Socha tha.....

    Ek Dua thi…..Jo kabhi zubaan par aa na saki
    Ek Ummeed thi…..Jo kabhi in sapno ko jaga na saki

    Socha tha us Khuda se kuchh apne liye bhi maang le
    Dhoond.te rahe.....par alfaaz bhi kahin kho gaye the
    Aakhir jab kuchh lafzon ka sahara mila hamko
    Tab iss Dil se…..apne liye chand khushiyan maangne ki khudgarzi adaa ho na saki

    Yeh aankhein thi… kabhi surkh ho na saki
    Ek woh neend in aakhoan me kabhi dikh na saki

    Socha tha iss jahan me thodi khushiyan ham bhi baant le
    Khojte rahe ki kush rehne ka zariya kya hai
    Badi muddat ke baad khushi mili hamko
    Par in laboan se akele muskurane ki khata ho na saki

    Wo ek yaad thi… iss Dil se kabhi ja na saki
    Uski ek jhalak thi… yeh nazrein kabhi pa na saki

    Socha tha unki yaado me aansu na bahaye ham
    Koshish karte rahe namumkin ko pane ki
    Jab dekha ek Dil ko apne saamne toot.te huye
    Toh uske gham me aansu na bahane ki gustaakhi hamse ho na saki​

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  2. well.. i know why haven’t changed it.. cuz you like the thought with these wordings.. but i think u should change some words so that it could be in rhythm... baaki aap to queen poetess hain...

    and reps :grin:
  3. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    ^^^^Hahaha....thanks Vipin for being the onli one to post ur comment :p:
    ppl actually got tortured i guess aftr reading this an extent that they cudnt find appropriate words to criticize it.....hehe
  4. #iR@


    hawwwwwwww... BEKAAR kis nay bola is poem ko yaar? NAAM BATAOO I"LL GO SHOOT THAT PERSON! :p: itniiiiiii fit hai yaar... the BEST part is ITS SIMPLE... i mean WORDS r all simple and NOT u know HI-FI vocabulary! :p:
  5. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    ^^^...haha ...thanks Hira...
  6. shak

    shak Harrr!

    :) .. no need to change anything ... its good as it is .. waisay i dont believe in 'editing' heartfelt poetry ... poetry is supposed to be spontaneous .. thats how it becomes powerful ..
    good thing you didnt edit this one ... i love it!
  7. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    nah i say u can do better ...thoda time diya kroooooo ..though i knw it dosent goes that way but try re !
  8. shsnawada

    shsnawada Cyborgs &amp; Pasta

    I hate poetry these days.
    And btw: I read the warning.
  9. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Whoa,,,,Shak on a mission?? :p: to read my pending poems ;) thnaks Bro :):)

    @Madhuresh....ummmmm.....i'll try :eek:: though i kno i wont b able to...:eek:: u also agree with the warning??:think:

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