Key to read this ghazal is to read it with correct punctuation and pronounciation....wish I could write it a bit longer.....but nevertheless an attempt to write smthng new.... Shikayat.. Mere janaze pe roye to sab the, ek tum hi the, jo muskura kar chale gaye; jeet na saka jo, main ta-umra, maut ke baad bhi, hara kar chale gaye bas khata yahi thi hamari, ki, hamen mohabbat hui thi tumse; par wah, kya khub rahi, mere mukkaddar ko mujhse, lada kar chale gaye. ab kabra main bhi hum, soyenge nahi ae dost; yeh mera dil hai koi chirag nahi, jo tum aye, aur bhuja kar chale gaye. maut ke baad bhi,hara kar chale gaye, mere mukkaddar ko mujhse, lada kar chale gaye. (for the only one I ever loved)
i think this is the first hindi poem frm u...i guess so : equally nice..... & yeah, agree with zoom here ^^^
Finally some one did read it..... i used to write in hindi but stopped abruptly....more into ghazals. thxs garima...u know u r the best thxs zoom thxs ujsen and madhuresh.....sounds like oscar speech. will post another one soon.
Treat urself well dude.. whatever it was.. i know a zilch about whatever may have happened but surely feel it wasnt your mistake.. Dont be too harsh on yourself.. Now about the poem... it is well written, and you have a good imagination Do write more in hindi, you are good and can do better.. Take care! What does ta-umra mean?.. sorry but i'm not that good at hindi :
Thanks!.. it makes more sense to me now again..good imagination and thought dude! Do post some more of hindi/urdu poems.. Not that your english one's arent good enough but hindi and urdu have a different thing altogether
