Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by walk_alone, Feb 27, 2006.

  1. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Key to read this ghazal is to read it with correct punctuation and pronounciation....wish I could write it a bit longer.....but nevertheless an attempt to write smthng new....


    Mere janaze pe roye to sab the,
    ek tum hi the, jo muskura kar chale gaye;
    jeet na saka jo, main ta-umra,
    maut ke baad bhi, hara kar chale gaye

    bas khata yahi thi hamari,
    ki, hamen mohabbat hui thi tumse;
    par wah, kya khub rahi,
    mere mukkaddar ko mujhse, lada kar chale gaye.

    ab kabra main bhi hum,
    soyenge nahi ae dost;
    yeh mera dil hai koi chirag nahi,
    jo tum aye, aur bhuja kar chale gaye.

    maut ke baad bhi,hara kar chale gaye,
    mere mukkaddar ko mujhse, lada kar chale gaye.

    (for the only one I ever loved)
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  2. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**


    lagta hai kisi ko pasand nahi aayi...............hmmmm
  3. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    bade chot khaaye ashique lagte ho yaar
  4. UjSen

    UjSen *#!EVIL*!!

    Hindi soooo damm difficult to read when written in English>
  5. zoomingrocket

    zoomingrocket TeChNiCaL AdMiNiStRaToR

    Strong lines buddy...
    Well written...

  6. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    i think this is the first hindi poem frm u...i guess so :eek::
    equally nice.....
    & yeah, agree with zoom here ^^^
  7. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Finally some one did read it.....

    i used to write in hindi but stopped abruptly....more into ghazals.

    thxs garima...u know u r the best
    thxs zoom
    thxs ujsen and madhuresh.....sounds like oscar speech.

    will post another one soon.

  8. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Treat urself well dude.. whatever it was..
    i know a zilch about whatever may have happened
    but surely feel it wasnt your mistake..

    Dont be too harsh on yourself..

    Now about the poem... it is well written, and you have a good imagination
    Do write more in hindi, you are good and can do better..

    Take care!

    What does ta-umra mean?.. sorry but i'm not that good at hindi :eek::
  9. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    ta-umra...its not hindi but urdu words means lifelong.....or for all my life.

  10. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM


    it makes more sense to me now
    again..good imagination and thought dude!

    Do post some more of hindi/urdu poems..
    Not that your english one's arent good enough
    but hindi and urdu have a different thing altogether
  11. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    hey this is very nice...

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