separation.....

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by astroguru26, Dec 14, 2005.

  1. astroguru26

    astroguru26 New Member

    hi..
    posting my poetry titled as..SEPARATION

    what worst can hapeen
    if you leave me....
    i used to say my heart
    and dont let it happen...
    dont dare to think....
    mind gets seized ..
    but the inevitable cannot be escaped.
    it happened and....
    i sensed the change in emotions,
    change in reactions,
    the attitude..
    trouble brewing between the one soul..
    difference in opinions
    undersecret lies..
    heart broken with those untold truth..
    cried helplessly
    now you are not crying seeing my tears..
    you became stone hearted..
    i became cautious to share my dream..
    as you ..are not mine...now
    i stopped thinking about what worst can happen..
    i was facing the heat of
    the separation..


    rohit
    astroguru26
     
  2. astroguru26

    astroguru26 New Member

    is it too bad ...to comment....


    rohit
    astroguru26
     
  3. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    hey rohit...its good dude...just that recently this forum is getting fludded with lots of poem aur sab mixup ho jata hai.

    I was reading last line as "I was feeling the heat of the separation" but closer look told me that its "facing" and not "feeling", and believe me usage of word "facing" gives true meaning here.

    nice job....
     

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