Saavan ki yeh.....

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Ali Yawar, Aug 2, 2012.

  1. Ali Yawar

    Ali Yawar New Member

    Hey..here is a poem by me..

    Saavan ki yeh madhur bayar,jo bahe tanik dheere-dheere,

    kuch mera haal sune,kuch apnee bat kahe dheere-dheere


    barkha ki girti boondon par,kirno ka roop jo naach uthe,

    jyon os ki komal boondon se,koi thandi thandi aanch uthe


    barkha-rani ka sparsh paa,vasundhara jo machal pare

    nadiya kee majhdhar mein koi,machli chap se uchhal pare


    jo dharti ki bheegi sugandh se ,man matvara ho dol uthe

    jo aamon ke bheege jhurmut se,koi pagli koyal bol uthe


    jyon murlidhar ki bansi baaje,madhur-madhur jamuna teere

    savan ki ye madhur bayaar,jo bahe tanik dheere-dheere........


    Here it is in devnagari....

    सावन की यह मधुर बयार,जो बहे तनिक धीरे-धीरे
    कुछ मेरा हाल सुने,कुछ अपनी बात कहे धीरे-धीरे

    बरखा की गिरती बूंदों पर,किरणों का रूप जो नाच उठे
    ज्यों ओस की कोमल बूंदों से ,कोई ठंडी-ठंडी आंच उठे

    बरखा-रानी का स्पर्श पा,वसुंधरा जो मचल परे
    नदिया की मझधार में कोई,मछली छप से उछल परे


    जो धरती की भीगी सुगंध से,मन मतवारा हो डोल उठे
    जो आमों के भीगे झुरमुट से,कोई पगली कोयल बोल उठे

    ज्यों मुरलीधर की बंसी बाजे,मधुर-मधुर जमुना तीरे
    सावन की यह मधुर बयार,जो बहे तनिक धीरे-धीरे.......
     
  2. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    I find it difficult to read Hindi stuff typed in English. Can you use google translate?
    Nice lines by the way.
     
  3. Ali Yawar

    Ali Yawar New Member

    yeah..i will post it in devnagri very soon...
     
  4. nice lines ..but dont you think its incomplete ...

    ur saying "jab aisa ho..." and u age all kinds of beauful expressions ... but where is the conclusion ?? ...
     
  5. Ali Yawar

    Ali Yawar New Member


    Monica jee...its not "jab aisa ho",its jo aisa ho....its more like a wish...jaise -- jo aisa ho jaae ... this is an imaginative scenario ... savan ki sheetal bayar yahan jeevan ke sundar chhanon ka pratinidhitv karti hai...hamare man mein ichcha hoti hai ki inhi chhanon ki aanandmayee chaon mein poora jeeevan kat jaaye.....is kavita mein hamne man ke unhi bhavon ko swar dene ka prayas kiya hai
     
  6. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    you are a good poet...
    keep posting..
    I wont comment on the content because I couldn't get the true meaning till you explained it..but I liked the lines..
    ...and the devnagri looks crappy...unedited...
     
  7. meri hindi kharaab ho gayi shhaayad ... ya phir meri samjh kamzoor ho gayi
     
  8. Ali Yawar

    Ali Yawar New Member

    Nahi,aisi koi baat nahi...thats the beauty of poetry...their is no standard interpretetion,.........actually,yeh kavita bahut se logon ko samajh nahi aaee,maine ye kavita kuch aur kavitaon ke saath 3-4 din pehle ek raat ko likhi thee.Tanhaee,ghame-hijran aur baadlon ke beech aankhmicholi karta chand...aap samajh rahi hain na....iski theme hi aisi ban paree ki log samajhne mein pareshaani mahsoos karte hain...maine bhi mausam ki ravaani mein aakar kuch zyada hi imagery based poem likh di.Fault is mine...but I should be allowed to use a little poetic license.........
     

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