another of ma poems... just rote it now... like always comments r HIGHLY welcomed... --> Running In Circles Running around in circles Not knowing where to go I look around the world walk by All lost in a world of their own I continue running around in circles Not realizing what I am doing It seems like a waste But the feeling of just doing something doesn’t let me stop The wind that gushes on ma face Gives me some sort of an unknown strength A strength I myself cant understand I continue running in circles The world sees me as a crazy freak But somehow all of them respect me in a different way Cause I continue doing whatever I think is right and that makes me superior to all of them I guess I stumble and I fall During this crazy job I have undertaken But I just maintain my balance ….And continue running in circles… Cause I believe That someday I will find The reason for doing this... thx for reading...
This is a brilliant write..honestly..the first reason for me to like it is that its very true..something everyone can relate to... Stanza 2 was it for me...that is really soooo relatable..stanza 3 well,I think you implied that for some reason you enjoy running in circles too,or maybe thats what I thought you meant.. Stanza 4..was good but I had a bit of a prob with you being superior to every1..I mean it does imply you are unique but superior??Maybe..but honestly I'm not complaining!!!!!St. 5 was again great..you've linked reality of life (ups n downs) to you poem and they blend perfectly.. And finally to wrap it all up you've come up with a BRILLIANT END!!!SEriously I loved the end to this one.I mean I actually did..its so...*speechless*...its like my siggy actually..which goes to show how much I can relate to this poem....
@ madhuresh... thanks man... great to have to back! u never xactly liked ma poems pehlay... but ur comments have been actually nice on ma recent poems! which is a GOOD thing! hehe @ i'm_not_neo... jee sir... ur comments... honestly couldnt stop smiling while readin ur post... wow man... u HONESTLY made ma poem come to life... i mean i just rite it and post it WITHOUT Thinking WHY i rote it... i mean i NEVER think k this represents this... bus GENERAL thing paker ker i just rite it down... in the end it DOES make sense to me... but i NEVER think k LIKHA KYA HAI! wow man seriously impressed... cause the explainations u gave are XACTLY wat i had in mind... :nw:
i'm running hey, dat was i gud read, liked it, especially this one "Running around in circles Not knowing where to go I look around the world walk by All lost in a world of their own" This made me read the rest of the poem... "I stumble and I fall During this crazy job I have undertaken But I just maintain my balance ….And continue running in circles… Cause I believe That someday I will find The reason for doing this..." 'someday i will find' was actually nice as it signify y r we (yep 'we' not 'u' as i cn relate to it) running in circles Although u shud hav used a word subtle than 'superior' in 4th para And as u said u "just rote it now" dats what is needed for such a poem, u actually cant think and write such thing [continue doing this ]
hehe..well I really enjoyed it.. you can always expect comments from me..keep it up and keep posting lol and I do hope you were kidding about the "jee sir"..: :dance:
@ max... thank u... well even i a feeling that using the word SUPERIOR was rong but like i already said i dont XACTLY think before i rite or while i rite... i just scribble down watever comes to ma mind... for a second i was like superior ki jaga someother word... i thought about it but jab damagh mein kuch nahi aya tou i was like watever SUPERIOR seems fine! @ i'm_not_neo... i dont know why i rote jee sir! but i mean watever i rite lol.... *actually laughing*