Reign of Appearance

I'm touching poems after a LONG time. This is sort of an incomplete version..i will add the remaining bits...
OK this is it:

I enter the unidimensional abyss,
Visual synthesis, venomous confinement;
No feel, no past, no heart,
Just the eyes you a s s h o l e

Shedding out thousands for
Brain-dead embellishers,
To enhance the sense that survives tedious tortures
While other dimensions cling onto our sterile hopes

Two one-dimensional machines clash for the cause
Look back when the primal instincts slip back again
Morality gives way,
Look, when ego conquers

[more wil be added]

This isnt any futuristic crap (man v machine or shit like that)
Tell me what you think about it....

 

Anybody actually knows what i'm talking about?? :shock: I'm almost getting used to this but just wait for a few threads for it to be an instinctive thing :grin:...

 

i din get it..

 

u know i didnt get it either.... :

there must be some1 who got it..... :think:

 

Yeah...the qusetion is who got it???

 

I'll wager that this is about your dreams. I could be wrong though.


I enter the unidimensional abyss,
Visual synthesis, venomous confinement;
No feel, no past, no heart,
Just the eyes you a s s h o l e


The unidimensional abyss would be a good way to describe the phenomena....and it also fits the no feel, no past, no heart and just the eyes.


Shedding out thousands for
Brain-dead embellishers,
To enhance the sense that survives tedious tortures
While other dimensions cling onto our sterile hopes

Good dreams, bad dreams....I know how that goes.


The third verse I couldn't make head or tail of.


Well written. My personal opinion was that it was too "wordy" to be something other than a screamo type song unless you really test your creativity.

 

That is mostly true.... :nw: Reps to you....
Yeah...next time i'll write something simpler...

 

@bjr

wow...

 

There are people who write 10000 times more obscure than this.. (dont blame me)
Somebody, preferably cryptic angel should teach me how to write in a simplistic way..

 

well.. observe n learn!!! :grin:

i probably write in a simple way coz my vocab sucks :RollLol:

 

Nice sarcasm indeed....

 

*ahem* ...:grin: ....i didnt get anything! :grin:

wondering what made you rite this sophisticated worded poem?!!:think:

 

Your laughter is too obscure to understand...whats "whatta woah poem!"??
I said that this wasnt any futuristic crap.....And where did the death metal come from??

 

Sorry mate but this is very much a real thing...thats going on..

 

ah, that sucks mate.





You don't have to write something simplistic. What I meant was that I'd personally find it very hard to fit these words to music.....but if you can, more power to you. Don't change a thing in that case.

 

I get it now!!!!

:rule:

 

n i like it

 

^^ wat did you get......can you xplain to me also? my small brain cant understand a thing!

 

^^i've been told not to blabber.... figure it out for urself (highly unlikely : ) or ask shs!!

 

Sorry but i think its the other way round.... Small brain cant write anything that could be understood by others :