Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by madhuresh, May 14, 2008.

  1. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    Wahtever is trapped inside is not a good man
    he seeks all the pleasures and eats whatever he can
    i try hard to run mama
    i try hard to rest
    i put all, he needs more
    im a cloun in his feast

    his all guests have no faces
    we call them spirt, life or sole
    they r not bright or like what u told
    they are small balled black-holes

    i dont want to kill others rape or destroy
    or drunk smoke and hellisuined laugh loud then cry
    i do it to save my, soft blood filled heart
    it wont beat the next second, if this man departs
    i hide all the beauty mama
    i hide the innocence
    i hide purity of my delicate body
    only the hunger i sense

    he never cares for bodies may be family or fan
    So wahtever is trapped inside is not a good man
    he seeks all the pleasures and eats whatever he can...
    my poin is just this much ... sole is not some thing pure good and blissfull..may be im wrong !
  2. augur

    augur I love bjr

    I thought this was about your boyfriend.... until I read the last line.

    I think you mean soul and not sole.
  3. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    when will we come out of BOY - GIRL - FRIEND - SHAADI and all....aaaahhh
    augut yaar humesha peet ke neeche se nahin soochan chaiye ... maine maana uss ka bhi dimmag hota hai ...par u have a bigger brain..not the pink one but the greay
  4. augur

    augur I love bjr

    So this IS about your boyfriend...
  5. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    re baba nahin ...this about a simple thought which says...
    our soul (as u rightly pointed out) which is always thought to be as teh most pure and good and ideal thingy ... is not so....actually what ever wrong we do is for some kinda fun and fun is seeked by our soles ....then since the sole is the powerfull part it controls and uses bodys thill it can threatning to leave if not satisfied....and one day when it finds the body of no use for its play it leaves...bas..................

    does it really sounds GAY ??.........i mean not too good with words but
    was it sooooooooo BAD :(
  6. augur

    augur I love bjr

    The first verse sounds like he likes whatever you do to him. Second verse sounds like he has lots of pals who he likes to sleep with. Third is saying, that you're nothing but a innocent little girl inside.

    It's not bad.
  7. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    THISH IS MY LAST POST ON THIS SITE good byeeeeeeeeee !
  8. augur

    augur I love bjr

    I'll miss you.
  9. fairandlovely

    fairandlovely peeka-boo

    lol the conversation was the best part of the thread.

    I actually liked this. For some reason it made me picture it like a Bob Marley song or maybe a little like what Dylan does. Not the lyrics because he is special but maybe sung in the same style.

    Its a nice concept but maybe you could build it up better.

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